Dearest

Dearest

A Poem by Kumala

Dearest.

 

 

Dearest brain:           telling my lungs to breathe

                                    My hands to shake

                                    Helping my eyes blink back the tears

                                    That you insisted to make

 

Dearest soul:            which resides somewhere inside

                                    Are you pure or rotten?

                                    Do you need saved?

                                    Or are you happy being forgotten?

 

Dearest heart:           are you still beating?

                                    You’ve been broken many times

                                    Yet you’re still pumping blood through my veins

                                    Where’s the strength you always find?


© 2017 Kumala



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Interesting and inventive format! It is good to think outside the box sometimes! Nicely done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kumala

1 Year Ago

Thank you .
Very striking, good writing!

Just "Do you need saved?" Needs editing.

But otherwise, compelling and original

Posted 1 Year Ago


This is so beautiful! I love the different elements and especially the title! such a grabber

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kumala

1 Year Ago

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I sure do love the short poetic discussion. wityh your mind heart and soul. very honest and genuine way of thinking and or feeling.. keep up the good work.. excited to see more

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kumala

1 Year Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read and review
I really liked the form of this, a letter to one's own body. So nicely written

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kumala

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your review :)
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They always say, follow your heart. This seems to be a good example of that.

I too like the format.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kumala

1 Year Ago

Thank you.
i liked the lay out. I related to the dialog "happy being forgotten" . Really different and effective. I also noticed that the heart was the only reliable one through out the conversation with yourself. Nice!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kumala

1 Year Ago

Always follow your heart :) thanks for taking the time to read and leave a review.

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Kumala
Kumala

Glasgow, United Kingdom



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