First love

Everybody remembers their first LOVE, 

Whether its a one sided one

or a childhood crush!!!

I remember it for my soul

making its own way for more

Its difficult to help along

Oh, you are my only hope

Work is none i do

Just sit and admire you

Oh, its its my only hope

May be i would be with you for more!!!

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Your first love is never forgotten. I still write poetry for a blond hair beauty 35 years later. I understand the emotion of the poem. The first love and heart break leave us wishing for a better ending. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Kunal Tandon]

Thanks for the appreciation
You never ever forget your first love....!!!!!!
:)

[Relic]

I think this is a fine poem written with a lot of heartfelt admiration for the one you desire. It is difficult to master the English language if you are from India or any other country. Therefore I don't think it is all that important to worry too much about being accurate right away. Speak from your heart and the message will get through. Good poem.

[Kunal Tandon]

ya its not easy
we usually make mistakes due to indianism(problems we commit due to interference of our mother tongue
thanks for the review....:)

[Relic]

You're welcome.

[s y e]

This was good a nice write!

1) Watch your grammatical errors.
e.g: change 'u' to 'you'

Otherwise it was really well done!

[Kunal Tandon]

its edited now.....:)

[s y e]

Yeah, you changed it as I posted it.

[Kunal Tandon]

now how's it??

[s y e]

Its a lot better but you need to remember your capital letters at the beginning of the sentences.

[Kunal Tandon]

okey.....:)

[s y e]

:-D

[s y e]

Perfect now!

[Kunal Tandon]

i am a fast learner......:)

[s y e]

Yeah, so I see! ;-D

[Kunal Tandon]

thanku....:)
at last.....:)

[s y e]

Welcome, anytime ;-D

[Kunal Tandon]

;)

[Trigorin]

Your concept is nice, but check that spelling and grammar, and I'd really advise replacing 'u' with 'you' in this piece - it comes off as very immature and, while that may have been what you intended, it does make the poem somewhat difficult to take seriously.

[Kunal Tandon]

okey i would edit this piece now...:)

[gombeggar]

remove a good portion of yer commas

'maybe I would be with you (or 'u') for more!!!'

yes...i rather like to just use 'u' as well

[Kunal Tandon]

Ok ....
Thanks for ur response
:)