Amnesia on the bed

Amnesia arose

 

I never pardoned you to wake me

With a splash of grief

Thrown on my closed eyes.

Arose I found me amid wetness.

A bed of ocean,

The salt of sweat.

Awoke I ran to catch you and held.

You melted like snows.

The play of “touch me”

Ended into dark amnesia,

Awoke I returned

To bed and waited…

 

 

Reviews

[JC Fox]

I agree, strong imagery with so few words you were able to portray and array of feelings in a short poem.

[jen -- JG]

strong imagery with so few words - very well done. The sense of heartache - hope, reality, and despair flow through this with laser like precision.

Excellent work.

jen

[deepoet]

Nice write

[TL Boehm]

a splash of grief thrown on closed eyes. the ghost of a relationship. Requiem for a memory. A haunting poem. Well written.

[Candle in the wind]

At times amnesia is bliss because happy memories that can't be lived again haunt you with pain.Great writing.I wish we could hold a grudge against those who wake us up from our elusive happy dreams with a splash of grief but at times the wrongdoer is innocent and feels unduly attacked.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Great piece...A total flawless piece. Such a great imagination..Very very vivid and intense piece...
Superb read overall :)

[George Love]

Your imagination blended with the imagination fo the reader to define what this poem might mean is amazing. Well done!

[An Ordinary Woman]

Your writing is always so creative and that is one thing I enjoy about it. I also appreciate that you seemingly leave it to the reader to define a meaning... I really like this one too. Thx poddarkushal

[Theta S. T.]

I really like this one..without really going into too much detail or even using alot of words you've really used you imagination. well done!

~~Theta

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Aside from maybe a few grammer errors, this is a really great piece. Flowed well, and the imagery was wonderful. Wonderfully written. Nicely Done.


Great Write.

Rayne