i love you

When i say i love you 

i dont just mean i like you alot

i dont mean ill like you for awhile 

then ill drop you on the spot

When i say i love you

i know that i am ready

even when my life is rough 

i have you to make me steady

When i say i love you

im talkin' 'bout forever

and with you i know that i

will never these ties sever

When i say i love you

everything im saying is true

when i say i love you

i hope you do too

Reviews

[MattWheatus]

Very sweet poem on what is clearly your favourite subject. From a style point of view, personally I would capitalise the poem throughout (though I sense that's not your preference which is fair enough).

[Kaelyn Shea]

hahaha thnak you!! i like to try to write about things other than love but it never works lol :)))

[Cody Wiggins]

AWWWWWWW this was realy cute lol

[Holly-Marie]

I loved this. The rhyming was wonderful and it was a light hearted but deep piece.
Thoughtful and full of emotion. I really liked it =)

[Kaelyn Shea]

haha amazing what rymes i can come up with qhen im bored in science class its the best class for dreaming

[zack]

this is great i love the rhymes u put together

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

Lol. I don't often glance on people's reviews unless it's the remote one underneath the review box, since that's when I write what I do, but you don't have to reply to people's reviews through another review. They don't know you say thanks, if you want to thank them, send them a message.

To the actual, poem. All I see wrong with this poem is the grammatical mistakes. Mechanically, it is a fine poem. "talkin' 'bout forever" is cute. The rhyme is good and doesn't seem too forced, so kudos there. Just remember, to capitalize the I's and add apostrophes and grammatical marks where appropriate. Put the first line of each text as this: "When I say, "I love you,"" It comes out to be more concise with what you're actually saying. Good job writing, and very well expressed.

Keep up writing, Kaelyn! I've noticed how much you've improved! It really is there! 'love ya! 9.2/10.

A Friend and a Writer,
S. W. Scaggs

[Dani shedd Lottermoser]

wow, very deep and powerful. Very well written!

[Kaelyn Shea]

thanks!

[The Last Poetic King]

this is very nice. good write.