My Lord, My Love

I'm fairly proud of this. It's something Lisabeth (S&D) may have written~

Tis been years since last I looked on that face serine,

Before I was cast into this hell filled darker scene,

With every breath I feel shame reflecting on these memories,

Yet of the morrow what new fate shall bring to hearts felonies?

I sayth unto the sky “Why? Oh, Why did you not let me die?

In place of this torment of souls unearthly cries,

This plague filling me with distain, even cursing thee holy name,

But in substitute vanity I beg, withered thoughts underneath my mane”,

Tears come easily, flowing faster then the wine or rain,

With every dark reminisce of his being brings me dense pain,

This ‘king of hearts’ whom I treasure with limitless measure,

And in his company I found both happiness and great pleasure,

With thankful calls to heavens angels -- hark! -- pray his heart never waver,

Bringth me this joy I desire…for he is My Lord, My Love and I wager,

That with ever kiss He ever gave, all the looks He ever made, He loved me,

And though darkness now fills my life (for He is nowhere near)… I see,

This eternal flame should not course upset; bringing forth hating hearts nor blame,

But a never-ending wish! That one-day we might regain and our love shall never be tamed. 

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I am taken with this. I really like the idea of the charachter from the story taking on a life of her own and writing like this. You know her background having created her and you know what she has been through and how she feels. And she is pursuing a wild, romantic course now. You could write many more poems in this vein ... I wonder if the poems might even take on a greater life than the story from which they spring? Could you find out more about the Wicked Lady and use her story as background material? I think you capture the period language well. Maybe Eliz the poet can have a more illustrious career than as a highway woman. You could have her out a-robbing, becoming famous, ending in jail, being condemned, escaping, I like the notion of Elis the poet very much. She could have all kinds of adventures...either in stories or as a poetess. Perhaps she escapes the gallows and becomes famous as a poetess eventually. Her romantic tragedy might be that she writes achingly beautiful love poetry -- like Petrach did about Laura -- that drives other men to love her, but she can never replace the love that drives her to write the poetry. So your story sort of becomes the background to something of bigger potential. I reckon you could have a lot of fun with Eliz.

[Helena]

Yes, you certainly should be proud. Well penned, imagery very palpable sentiments
superb and much enjoyed by me. I read it several times actually!

Thank you for submitting this beauty to my contest "A Chance to Shine"!

~ Helena ~

[Flame DM]

Very creative and unique. Haven't seen a poem like this on this site! you could definately feel her, i agree with the other reviewers on this XD

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[sk8tagirl95]

loved it :)

[Jeanne Broome]

I am overwhelmed. This is an amazing poem. I could feel her....I felt like I was inside her living out her thoughts...through her. It is a wonderful poem. Thank you so much for sharing it.

[indianhost]

a men to your poem i wait and prayer that i to will meet our lord someday . i think your poem was realy good and may god bless you hun

[Fantasyfairy]

You should be proud. This is well written, flows beautiful and has excellant phrasing throughout. Well done. XX

[Gandré]

yes, you can be proud! Indeed it has got a very classical Victorian style (?) I don't know so much of classical English poems, but it has this art, I smell that time. beautiful.