My Loneliest Heart

Accept back my love - so we'll start anew
My loneliest heart - is lost without you
It screams loud at night - no less so by day
It bleeds for the one - that long got away

But gone you are now - as I am gone too
Still hope that my path - will lead me to you
I'll run fast along - no moment's delay
If then in the end - with you I can stay

I'm lost on the road - without much a clue
Don't know the right way - I have to pursue
I'm worried that here - forever I'll stay
With loneliest heart - is how I will pay

Back home in your realm - my love ever true
I'll finally feel - I'm not ever blue
You'll summon the sun - you'll banish the grey
I'll hear all the tunes - your heartstrings will play

Reviews

[David Lewis Paget]

A very accomplished pattern of rhyme and metre, Lola. I've seen that hyphenated trick done before, by Valentine actually. I don't know whether I'd prefer commas myself, or to break it down into shorter length eight line stanzas. It works either way. You're in control of your subject material, and manage to convey that feeling of loss and loneliness effectively, nicely done.

[Lady Lola]

Thank you so much for your astute review. I was pondering the hyphen/ comma / break conundrum myself. I usually go with commas, but thought to try the hyphenated version as a means of a longer pause.

[silentLIGHT]

Your poems read very nicely,
something I still struggle with at times.

It's great how put a hard situation in such simple words.
And as you can see from other reviews, it makes it really easy to relate to.

I really enjoy reading your poems, I hope you'll add more soon.

[SuspectGray]

First of all thank you for rhyming. I do love a poet that can play by some rules. letting go may be hard but it seems you kept the best of the memories with you.

[Lady Lola]

Thanks for noticing the pattern - nowadays people seem to forget to follow metres.
Yes, love is what remained - what good does resentment do, eh?

[Destiny Dreamer]

OH MY GOODNESS! YOU ARE SO GREAT! I can 100% relate to every single word of your poetry. Like it is written for me. Indeed, it is written for all the broken hearts! I am a HUGE HUGE fan of LOVE, Longing and sad Poetry.. I love the way you have worked with the words. Everything is just so PERFECT, the rhythm everything! ... It is very hard to fall out of love, to be apart. Some do move on but for some LOVE IS TOO DEEP that they couldn't think of anything but wanting them back ..
I just love the idea.
LOVE IT TO BITS!
Thanks for sharing an AMAZING poetry!

[Lady Lola]

Thank you so much for your comment! It made my day. :-)
Losing someone you truly love is very hard indeed, part of you will always love them and long for them. I'm glad my loss can be turned into something other people relate to and enjoy.

[Destiny Dreamer]

You're WELCOME Dear! Of course it is. :) ^_^