Half of Me

My passion sits beneath a stone

A place where I can't go

For death has come to half of me

With one half dying slow

How cruel is death to take my heart?

But yet it lets me breathe

It came between the two of us

And it will not let me leave

Half of me has forsaken life

It lays out in a field

The other half will not let go

It simply will not yield

I pray for death to come my way

Each day on her behalf

But death can't see how much I miss

My beloved second half?

My passion sits beneath a stone

Where one day I will be

I can't be whole until I'm back

With the other half of me

Reviews

[b.platte]

Oh wow. I started reading this and didn't realize what it was saying until the third stanza. So, I went back to re-read it and my mouth just dropped. This is so beautiful. I mean I've never had an overwhelming feeling of tragdedy like I have reading this. I don't knwo how you did it. This deserves to win all the awards.

[Whiskurz]

Thank you......Whisk

[LJW]

Congratulations on 1st place in a contest we both entered! Truly deserving of the top spot.

[LJW]

Truly original writing. Effortless rhyme scheme
A surprise you were writing about the two halves of one self.

I loved this piece. A lot. :-)

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend.....Whisk

[elizasexybeth]

this is very good. it scares me for to loose my other half so I feel it in your poem brilliant analisis

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend.....Whisk

[Dalia]

I can relate to this wonderful piece of write, loosing someone so dear makes us feel as if living is not complete at all, something is missing, sometimes more even than the half.

[Whiskurz]

Thank you Dalia.....Whisk

[jenn]

Beautifully written- brilliant piece. 'I can't be whole until I'm back, With the other half of me.' Sad but in a sensitive and endearing way. & I love the way you put this together. 'Half of me' - great title! & I can definitely relate to this feeling of missing your other half. Thank you for sharing your work.

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend....Whisk

[Ama May Cooper]

Very deep and heartfelt piece, your sorrow speaks bounds for your love. What a tragedy to loose love and live on without it, So beautiful and truely the emotions are written there for all to see. This is truely amazing.

[Whiskurz]

Thanks Ama.......Whisk

[Frieda P]

Heart wrenching and bittersweet read. This is powerful stuff Whisk. Nicely pen'd.

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend....Whisk

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, and I cast my vote for you!

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend....Whisk

[Frieda P]

;-)

[Kitt]

Nicely done. Emotions came through clearly. The flow was great. Good job.

[Whiskurz]

Thanks Kitt......Whisk

[Akshita Thareja]

This is so sad and so touching and so beautiful and so awesome at the same time....just love reading your poems :-)

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend....Whisk

[dawn aulis]

Powerful, I think we all have times when we feel this way, yet words are hard to find. You described the feeling perfectly.

[Whiskurz]

Thanks again Dawn....Whisk