Being Silly

Being Silly

A Poem by LawrenceRaybon
"

The explanation of why I am most assuredly not Silly!

"
I felt like being silly
but Silly said "No!"
I asked him, "Why?" 
His reply,
"Cause Silly said so!"

So I went and got Angry,
and Angry got mad.
I asked him, "Why?"
His reply,
"Cause Silly is bad!"

© 2014 LawrenceRaybon


Author's Note

LawrenceRaybon
Good? Bad? Meh? Anything I can do to improve?

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I very much enjoyed this! Although, I would love to see more of it. Maybe expand on it? It is a very charming piece of work. (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is great! I love the humor and the rhythm. The unique characters add an extra umph to the piece as well. Sorry but I have nothing to say about improvement. This is as perfect as perfect can be. One thing I could say as that you could take this further. You could go into several emotions. Each emotion could be a character. Just food for though. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I'M STILL LAUGHING.
Can't comment yet on competition..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Well, I AM Silly, so I say do as Silly says! :) This feels like the beginning of a longer piece; good, but feels unfinished.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LawrenceRaybon

9 Years Ago

Thank you! I'll look at adding more lines, don't quite know where to take it though...
haha that was nice :D
add a few more silly lines ;)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LawrenceRaybon

9 Years Ago

Thank you! I see about adding more silly lines, just have to figure out where to take this...

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LawrenceRaybon
LawrenceRaybon

Jackson, MS



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