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Dark Secrets

Dark Secrets

A Poem by Legacy
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Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

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DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy


© 2011 Legacy



Author's Note

Legacy
What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

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I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!


Posted 6 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.




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Well done. Love wins...always. :D

Posted 7 Months Ago


I enjoyed this on so many levels, I've been away for years and have finally returned but this is a surprise I'm glad I made it back to read.Just need more towards the visual.

Posted 1 Year Ago


There's something about this poem which, really and truly, rings a bell from deep down within. ;-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this! It speaks on so many levels of emotions.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,
Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand"
--I feel like these made me breathe. The first stanzas were constricting me, holding me back and gripping me like I cannot breathe. Then I go to these lines and I felt alive. I felt hope and light. This is a wonderful poem. It invites me to look into the positive facet of everything.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is good. Reminds me of a single mother struggling with how to raise a child alone. Comma usage may need a tweak. Overall, well written poem with good subversive imagry.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pulled me in with this. gripping. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simplistic yet eloquent imagery. I loved the power it held with it's crisp sentence structure and phrasing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely poem ' ball and chain, I am restrained ...very nice;)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This writing grabbed me by the mind and pulled into this fog. I could not take anything else in except that which arose from these lines. Twirling in the fog and looking for light to follow back to my safe little world.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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