Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[karenlee]

Pulled me in with this. gripping. :)

[briannachristine]

Simplistic yet eloquent imagery. I loved the power it held with it's crisp sentence structure and phrasing.

[Gypsy]

Lovely poem ' ball and chain, I am restrained ...very nice;)

This writing grabbed me by the mind and pulled into this fog. I could not take anything else in except that which arose from these lines. Twirling in the fog and looking for light to follow back to my safe little world.

[deejayb567]

I really enjoyed this, loved the emotion you were able to invoke without overcrowding it with words...to the point and easily cuts to the core, especially if you can relate.

[Sandra Pinkerton]

I feel as though I am with my friends who are wasted and sharing from somewhere dark and secret, of coarse this has been many years ago...it jogs my deep memories. I need to read it over and over as I feel it will reveL many meanings as I peel the onion skin a layer at a time

[Lucifer Jones]

Very nice. Love the picture this allows your mind to form. A pleasure to read.

[Abeer until dawn]

I saw some light in your dark secret ...
Beautiful peice, Legacy

[Dikron Ickles]

Skaaawy stuff that, like them egg-pods left in that ship in the first 'alien' movie...in a cold, dank, abandoned wrecked ship on a distant unknown planet...lying in wait...(..lingers, and laughs within); getting ready to spring forth and snap into the face-shield of nearest curious humanoid to suck the living strengthening fluids from and to then pupate into a new life beyond...good writing.

[Leah Mayes]

this poem makes me sad... reminds me of someone torn between obligation and bliss...