Ode to a Bug

Ode to a Bug

A Poem by Legion
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Poor bug.

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Ode to a Bug

 

Poor bug

Drowned.

At the bottom

It was found.

A short life

Shorter made

In this glass

Of lemonade.

I wondered of its dying thoughts

Or if it truly thinks.

Wish I'd found it sooner,

Before I'd finished my drink.

 

 

Legion

12APR08

© 2008 Legion


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I like the overall irony with the bug's final destination being the drinkers mouth. It is an enjoyable piece with a nice dose of wit. My favorite lines were "Wish I'd found it sooner, /Before I'd finished my drink."

I would say that I felt line 10 was a bit rough overall. You set up that great thought about what was going through the bugs mind in line nine, but the flow is a bit off.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like this-- a fun poem to read, and it made me laugh! Congrats on your win in the ode contest.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really liked this especially the ending and the simple thoughts and lines.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is ... fantastic. I've just read it again. Your mastery is second to none.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the overall irony with the bug's final destination being the drinkers mouth. It is an enjoyable piece with a nice dose of wit. My favorite lines were "Wish I'd found it sooner, /Before I'd finished my drink."

I would say that I felt line 10 was a bit rough overall. You set up that great thought about what was going through the bugs mind in line nine, but the flow is a bit off.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LOL This is so funny and cute! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is officially the funniest most ludicrous poem on God's Earth. I've laughed my butt off for five minutes! No wonder it placed in the competition. Congratulations.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You know...now I have to add Zappin...my ode to mosquitoes.

I cant read anymore today, you have me in tears from laughing this morning.

Thank you for being insane.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love how you created something so funny and creative out of a little moment most of us wouldn't think twice about. Well, I guess you would think about the icky factor of it...

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hahaha! So many times I have done that! Another nicely written poem!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ewwww!!! Such a funny, silly poem that flowed so nicely. I hate it when I find bugs in my food. Well done :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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