To Write/To Right

To Write/To Right

A Poem by Legion
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Something new I was playing with.

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To Write/To Right

 

To write     To right

The words,     The wrongs

With pen,     Of men

That fill      That kill

The mind      Their kind.

Of thoughts.      No thoughts

Giving      Given

To pieces     To peace

Of love     Or love,

When the heart rules.     Where only hurt rules.

 

 

Legion

21June08


© 2008 Legion



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Experimentation juxtaposes with genius, Legion, for I took a second glance and was delighted that I did.
Rhyme...toying with emotion, theme and word choice ( incredible word choice, I might add) ... leave
the reader with many intense thoughts... so many questions left to ponder. Compelling final line...
XXOXOXX


Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Dear Legion,

This is fabulous. A wonderful contrast of ideas pulled together by common language threads. This is the best of poetry. Outstanding work.

Impressive. Highest marks!

Best regards,

Rick

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TW/TR is like ... ah ... splittin' man ... Simultaneous indie but connected sentences are quite an awesome pair ...
Kewl, Leg...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This rocks. I've been thinking of you...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

crazy cool!!! very unique and expiremental.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ooooh, playful! I like. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I will have to agree with Apolliana. This was mere genius. For just experimenting, you have out done yourself.
Perfect formation and flow. So few words and yet both poems pack a powerful punch. Well done, Jim. :-)
Carole

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great! It begs to be read so many different ways. First "To Write", next "To Right" and last I mixed them both together. What you managed here is a type of literary Neopolitan ice cream!

A problem that I always have when writing too fast is I will type "I think I am write." I hate doing that, I do the same thing with here and hear, but luckily other people catch that.

It also displays a type of mystical mirror. One that doesn't truly reflect but generally reflects. Great, great work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the mirror effect is a brilliant approach... each homophone playing off the next. i would like to see more of these in truth. great idea and execution!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i loved how you made it double sided. that was so emotional. great rhyme sceam.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed this poem very much. It's unusual and beautiful in it's simpleness. Makes me wonder in a deep sort of kind of way.

smiles..

-Disa Igabod

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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