Experimentation juxtaposes with genius, Legion, for I took a second glance and was delighted that I did.
Rhyme...toying with emotion, theme and word choice ( incredible word choice, I might add) ... leave
the reader with many intense thoughts... so many questions left to ponder. Compelling final line...
XXOXOXX
Actually found this very interesting and very well done. I enjoyed reading it, though admitedly I had to re-read it several times before I saw how truely well written it was and what a great job you did. Congrats, I really think you have something here, especially since it was "just something you were playing around with". You get better and better... :)
A very interesting experiment with form. I am sure you saw the connections
though they were not always clear. Had all the words showed a clearer story
line, it might have been a clearer effort. As with all writing there is room for
editing. Poets do not need to make changes in anything they write on the
right or the left, but reviewers always ask for more.
Fascinating piece. I love all the paradox and juxtaposition. You have a simplicity here that belies depths to this ditty. I feel like it is a prayer of sorts, then again, it is a proclamation. Well done sir.
very imaginative in its own standard, bestowed the dreamers edge of two entirely different swords, slashing a heart and the strings..pulling off the core of what homonyms could sound, yeah, even better with the artisan who writes it eloquently
Experimentation juxtaposes with genius, Legion, for I took a second glance and was delighted that I did.
Rhyme...toying with emotion, theme and word choice ( incredible word choice, I might add) ... leave
the reader with many intense thoughts... so many questions left to ponder. Compelling final line...
XXOXOXX
I write about various topics. Mostly I write poetry/songs. I took my screen name from a concept album/epic poem I wrote years ago titled "Legion's Legacy: Tales of the Damned" which was inspired by .. more..