To Write/To Right

To Write/To Right

A Poem by Legion
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Something new I was playing with.

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To Write/To Right

 

To write     To right

The words,     The wrongs

With pen,     Of men

That fill      That kill

The mind      Their kind.

Of thoughts.      No thoughts

Giving      Given

To pieces     To peace

Of love     Or love,

When the heart rules.     Where only hurt rules.

 

 

Legion

21June08

© 2008 Legion


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Experimentation juxtaposes with genius, Legion, for I took a second glance and was delighted that I did.
Rhyme...toying with emotion, theme and word choice ( incredible word choice, I might add) ... leave
the reader with many intense thoughts... so many questions left to ponder. Compelling final line...
XXOXOXX


Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Actually found this very interesting and very well done. I enjoyed reading it, though admitedly I had to re-read it several times before I saw how truely well written it was and what a great job you did. Congrats, I really think you have something here, especially since it was "just something you were playing around with". You get better and better... :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very interesting experiment with form. I am sure you saw the connections
though they were not always clear. Had all the words showed a clearer story
line, it might have been a clearer effort. As with all writing there is room for
editing. Poets do not need to make changes in anything they write on the
right or the left, but reviewers always ask for more.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fascinating piece. I love all the paradox and juxtaposition. You have a simplicity here that belies depths to this ditty. I feel like it is a prayer of sorts, then again, it is a proclamation. Well done sir.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is awesome clever! the most original idea i've seen in a long time! love it! 100 pointer.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the style of this poem, very clever, and the way the two sides are intertwined, it holds a lot of meaning.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Superb, my friend! I love the set up and the meaning behind it!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

creative as it is...

very imaginative in its own standard, bestowed the dreamers edge of two entirely different swords, slashing a heart and the strings..pulling off the core of what homonyms could sound, yeah, even better with the artisan who writes it eloquently

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved this piece, it is so creative and clever. You did a great job with it. Wonderful writing!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Now I love this, this is awesome, like how this is set up.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Experimentation juxtaposes with genius, Legion, for I took a second glance and was delighted that I did.
Rhyme...toying with emotion, theme and word choice ( incredible word choice, I might add) ... leave
the reader with many intense thoughts... so many questions left to ponder. Compelling final line...
XXOXOXX


Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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