More Specific

For the 69 word story contest as a challenge. :) May use this in a future story as well.

More Specific

 

 

Should have been more specific. Didn't really think about what I was saying when he asked me what I wanted. That devilish b*****d knew my weakness and he used that knowledge. Played me like a fiddle. I wanted immortality. Sold my soul for it. How was I to know the world was going to end soon. Floating through space for eternity is such a drag. Lucifer's a freaking comedian.

 

 

Legion

9AUG08

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Legion,

Yes, be careful what you ask for. And just wait until everything around you is gone, the Universe expanded to nothingness, the elementary particles all decayed. Now at least you have the stars to look at, to occupy your time. But you have received absolute permanence. Nothing is permanent, only you, floating forever in empty nothingness.

Very best regards,

Rick

[Archia]

I enjoyed how much of a story there was in this, it really told this detailed plot in such few words.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Very imaginative and I assume difficult being only 69 words used. I always loved the premise and you don't go into the normal door of this type of story, which I can appreciate! Good write.....

[Lily1111]

Stung by a bit of poetic justice eh?

[bailish]

Loved this! The theme of selling your soul to the devil has been played so many ways, it's great to see a unique perspective on it, and so concisely, too. Excellent!

[Chillbear Latrigue]

Wow. This was amazing. One paragraph. This person wants immortality and the world ends. That is some bitter irony. Give them what they want and then make them hate you for it. I really don't know what to say other than that this is excellent.

[NCPanthersgurl]

Nice. Leaves the reader thinking, and it's open for imagination.

Nice work.

[Master Morality]

Heh, heh, heh. Mans greatest desire has always been immortality and yet... I can't think of any great use for it.

A great little write! Your humour as always has a great little nip to it.

[Angel's Lady]

Played me like a fiddle. - Be more specific...hmm...Are you Johnny, perhaps? haha Great write.
Good Luck!

[Nick Erickson]

Hahahahahahaha............. Oh the irony of it all.

Excellent piece, the last two sentences very vivid and funny.

Well done!!