Clouding Chat rooms

Clouding Chat rooms

A Poem by Lei
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Enter my chat room, I dare ya! In love with the mind, a dreamer!

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Foster my intellect, preside over my random thoughts, and amorphous my feelings.
 I like to dream. 
 It is impossible to fathom as the breath of the universe.
 What do I speak of with love?
The brain. 
 Even when you don't let me sleep.








© 2017 Lei



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S few points:

Don't talk to your reader, involve them, emotionally.

And aside from not knowing who might want shapeless feelings, "amorphous" is not a verb.

And finally, though you might have intent for the disconnected thoughts that intent doesn't make it to the text, so it's lost.

Sorry my news isn't better.

Posted 4 Days Ago



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Added on November 10, 2017
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Tags: Dreamer, dreams, adventure, universe, science, love, brain

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Lei
Lei

Los Angeles , CA



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