J3S7S

I heard the line 'In a world full of lies the truth is contagious' and immediately related it to the story of Jesus. I changed the word to J3S7S to give a more computery feel

 

In a world full of lies the truth is contagious

When I heard the tales of you I thought them outrageous

There was a light in the East that was re-mapping the Earth

When the word reached our shores it had been long since your birth

 

But I travelled the roads, across the seas and the lands

I was just one in the crowds, but I outstretched my hands

When you came close by you seemed to be shining

From the hair on your head, to your white robe lining

 

You stopped and stared, you looked straight into me

You searched out my soul so knowingly

I was not ill and I needed no cure

But I shook the hand of a light so brilliantly pure

 

And when I did I felt so effected

I wanted to follow you, to be connected

In the calm of your eyes was a light so true

A peace for the world so long overdue

Reviews

[Greg Diller]

I really like this.

" Iwas not ill, I needed no cure
But I shook the hand of a light so brilliantly pure" and "In the calm of your eyes was a light so true
A peace for the world so long overdue" were my favorite lines, because they seem to express the true menaing to this poem, well for me they did. Nice job.

[leighgreen]

Thanks for your feedback Greg

[TL Boehm]

ah this is wonderful. for whatever reason I think I like the first verse the most but the entire poem is strong and the message - such a lift.

[R.G. Bennet]

I liked the innocence and hope of this poem. My favourite line was the last - "A peace for the world so long overdue." Good job.

[leighgreen]

Thanks R.G

[Richard Lane]

Another reason I am happy to have joined the writers cafe' is I have the luck of being with some of the best and most professional literary artists i have ever had the luck to read and I hope to get the chance to visit England, Scotland and Ireland because my family tree emigrated from the English aisle. I think it's time to find out if I still have family members under my last name. Kudos and Cheers Leighgreen.

[leighgreen]

Many thanks for your review , if and when you visit you will find many Lanes in Briton

[Princess Helviti]

Beautiful writing and the flow as well... nice work... :)

[leighgreen]

Thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

A good message in the poem. In the new age of computers tech. Would be difficult to see a real man of hope. I like the way you ended the poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[leighgreen]

Thanks for your review, I wanted to try and bring him closer in some way, he may not be any good on computers though

[MELODY CARNEY aka Kimbe..]

This was well done.

[leighgreen]

Thanks Melody

[Brittany]

Excellent theme here. I think you truly captured what having a relationship with Jesus is about. Thank you so much for posting. I liked your phrasing as well. Well done.

[leighgreen]

Thanks for reading and your review

[Dayran]

A conveyance of the message that the time has come when what we have been searching for is at last within our reach.

[leighgreen]

Yes it represents that, that is part of the meaning, thank-you my wise friend

[Que Sera Sera]

Interesting read. I took this a couple of different ways. One, the affect of a initial attraction to a potential suitor. Two, as in awe of a political or religious leader, more spiritual came to mind, but in any case both ideas came to me at once. Well done!

[leighgreen]

Thanks for your review

[Neva Flores - Changeful..]

This is deeply spiritual......amazingly rhythmic.......beautiful!

[leighgreen]

Thanks for your review