Mortal Pleasure

Erotic betrayal

 

 

Mortal Pleasure

 

 

 

I am built for mortal pleasure from the garden of original sin

I am a bad and fallen angel, the game you will not win

I told you to keep away that I’m no go good for you

Take your things and get out, that’s it we’re through

 

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You saw me and thought you’d use me " Break my heart?

But I saw through your treachery, right from the start

So I went along with you little game and played a lovesick fool

Until you fell into MY trap and I could treat you so cruel

 

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You thought you knew me and “This thing called love”

 But no you don’t, I am giving you the big shove

I tempted you, tormented you, offering you sweet delight

Until you finally gave up and just surrendered to the night

 

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Now you’re all washed up and broken, crying on the floor

I told you stay well clear, but you came back for more (pain)

 

How does it feel?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[smurfett]

That is awesome!! I can relate....lol Nicely written.

[leighgreen]

Its a shame that so many of us can

[The Siren]

Cold and cruel. I like it! A little different from your other work.

[leighgreen]

Yes fancied a change

[Katrina Mckeown]

this is brilliant, thank-you for sharing! )

[Neva Flores - Changeful..]

One gets the feeling that the poet has won.......wonderful piece.

[Michael G.]

Very good, well written poem. The storyline is outstanding from beginning to end. And it flows wonderfully. I agree with Marie, I don't see the need for mature only.

[Monica]

"I am built for mortal pleasure from the garden of original sin
I am a bad and fallen angel, the game you will not win
I told you to keep away that I’m no go good for you
Take your things and get out, that’s it we’re through"

...Brilliant!!! I love this, you let us know who and what you are, yet this person did not take heed to your warnings...until it was too late and was left "all washed up and broken, crying on the floor".

Great job! Keep writing! :)

[Robbie]

Nice!...You have warned the reader in the beginning~
"I am built for mortal pleasure from the garden of original sin
I am a bad and fallen angel, the game you will not win"~ Such an irresistible temptation you have penned. Well done!

[Mockingbird]

sounds like someone bitter who is taking it out on some innocent person. great poem.

[Eagle Cruagh]

It was great in a devilish way.
I hope it was not written by some
poor soul who stumbled into your trap.
There are plenty of the others who just
don`t give a rap.
----- John

[Marie]

Very good. I like the idea of someone being a "bad and fallen angel". I'm not sure this poem needs a "mature" rating.