Autumn

Autumn

A Poem by Leslie Philibert
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for Carl Sharpe

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Autumn is a frozen church
We wait at heavy doors
That smell of rust,

Not a moon cold enough
To be called heartless
Or breathclouds of old steam

More an estuary of
Dumped mist afraid to ice;
The taste of wax on your lips;

A frame of hair round a
Hatted face, our steps as slow
As if we must tread water,

You are ice and rain and
The first crystals and even
More than this, beside me.


© 2014 Leslie Philibert



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'More an estuary of
Dumped mist afraid to ice'

From the images ... a flow - in feeling and in nature - captured at perhaps at a point of transition...
or frozen in time....but 'even more than this'

Beautifully written.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Oh wow. The words are carefully chosen, there's no waste at all. I so love it's reference to autumn (my favorite season) and its effortless way of flashing images in my mind. Such a gorgeous picture.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Great poetic quality..I like the descriptiveness of the work..Desiring the cool days of Autumn in this heat of summer..Sara

Posted 2 Years Ago


wondering who Carl Sharpe is?? such a unique take on Autumn and a Church ... holding on to the faintest vestiges of .. a reason to keep the doors open ... one wishes sometimes that riding a fence would get too uncomfortable ...lets rage hot or cold .. make up your mind kind of thing .. Churches can be the ruin of many a young man (and woman) ... your closing verse makes it very personal and i am pondering ... your use of metaphors and personifications are inspiring .. and such a twist on the dark side of things ..
"Not a moon cold enough
To be called heartless"
is really impressed upon my mind ...
E.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Autumn is a frozen church,what an interesting expression.
very well crafted.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Is this the same Carl Sharpe as on Verse Writes? His work is very similar but perhaps a little less precise than yours Leslie. As always, sublime in its well crafted, well described photographic metaphors.

Posted 2 Years Ago


beautiful depiction of autumn

Posted 2 Years Ago


reading this again gives me chills, the metaphor and the imagery in this poem is amazing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I read this a few times and found different meanings - at first glance, you may be speaking of the season, at second perhaps a lost love - someone you have put upon a pedastal - "a frozen church" -
Beautifully written and a pleasure to read.

:) Julie

Posted 2 Years Ago



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Leslie Philibert
Leslie Philibert

Bavaria, Germany



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