Autumn

Autumn

A Poem by Leslie Philibert
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for Carl Sharpe

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Autumn is a frozen church
We wait at heavy doors
That smell of rust,

Not a moon cold enough
To be called heartless
Or breathclouds of old steam

More an estuary of
Dumped mist afraid to ice;
The taste of wax on your lips;

A frame of hair round a
Hatted face, our steps as slow
As if we must tread water,

You are ice and rain and
The first crystals and even
More than this, beside me.


© 2014 Leslie Philibert



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This makes me long for the approaching spring and warmth. Valentine

Posted 3 Years Ago


The best I have read in this mad place yet, your closing triplet quite the gem, very good I say, Bren

Posted 3 Years Ago


Your imagery paints a very lonely and longing picture. Going through all the the things they've always shared, but the narrator finds s/he is going through them alone rather than with the persona at his/her side. It's so very sad when that emotional chasm leaves people dangling on the ice-bound precipice.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Evocative of much more than autumnal wet and chill, Les....more to do with a cooling, I suspect. This wistful piece is powerfully and thoughtfully crafted. P.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very strong natural images, it was a pleasure to read, it has its own flow :) Great job !

Posted 3 Years Ago


It's good to read one of your works again upon feeling better. I enjoyed this poem, it holds strong imagery penned creatively cool. An excellent write.


Eric Cox
(Formerly Spectre.)

Posted 3 Years Ago


like that song from Romeo and Juliet...

"what is a maid, ice and desire"

we are almost autumn, almost winter on our own....almost a season...

that frozen church can be entered...even if we have to tread life to get there...but with that love beside us...that door opens more easily...

a very clever use of wording in this poem.

nicely done, Leslie
your poetry moves my spirit to write.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ah, precious, just so precious...you write so wonderfully! ♥

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very nice, unique descriptions of autumn here. It's nice to read imagery that's not only usually limited to Autumn's leaves, winds and cold.

Posted 3 Years Ago



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Leslie Philibert
Leslie Philibert

Bavaria, Germany



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