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Bird In A Piano

Bird In A Piano

A Poem by Leslie Philibert
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a surreal idea I tried to put into words

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You are a bird in a piano
Atonal with broken wings,
           panic flight of triplets

That hammer both lacquer and bass
Lieder of a bloodied beak
           and shocked, artless eyes;

All the notes you play
Are glued with flightlessness
           the tone of air stolen
           the sky closed and dark. 

© 2014 Leslie Philibert



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For me a woman, who is unhappy, and flightless in a relationship that should be beautiful, but its not.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Dali would have to agree, as I do, this is surreal. Nice pen!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very clever and impressive poem.
Love how you incorporated the bird into the piano.


Posted 3 Years Ago


That hammer both lacquer and bass
Lieder of a bloodied beak
and shocked, artless eyes;

concise and strong. wonderful

Posted 3 Years Ago


wow, that was very great . i loved the metaphores here . well done

Posted 3 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words
I really like this. Very impressive. I could see the bird trapped within the image of the piano.
Creative and very unique.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Leslie Philibert

3 Years Ago

As ever, thanks and best wishes !
Tina Kline

3 Years Ago

You are welcome.
i find this poem very interesting....i like the analogy of the piano, the keys, the tune being out of air and find, for me, it relates to someone who was a writer, but now that part of him or her is broken, so this person steals the tunes of others....but it is so obvious because they don't ring with the same verve as words of their own would....and thus the sky becomes "closed and dark"---

Posted 3 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words, this is( I hope) a literary nod at Dali or Picasso, your review is excel.. read more
Surreal or not Leslie this inspires thoughts of dirges played perhaps out of key. Again I see parallels with life itself and how often fragile people act like trapped birds who are fragile and unable to take flight from their situation.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

3 Years Ago

Thanks John, for the kind words and excellent review.
The imagery is powerful in this poem. I love it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

3 Years Ago

Pleased you liked this, my best wishes.

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Leslie Philibert
Leslie Philibert

Bavaria, Germany



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