DONE

Feet pounding, fist clinched,

She punches the wall as hard as she can.

She looks at her split knuckles in amazment,

Even as the blood runs down her hand,

She feels no pain.

She puts her back against the wall,

Sinks down to the floor,

And starts to cry.

She is not crying for him,

Or her now broken hand.

She is crying over all the time she has wasted on you.

Over how much of her life she has put off,

Just to get you back on your feet.

She cant belive after all this time,you still did what you did,

Or that you are back in rehab.

She made you her number one priority,

She even put off love for you.

But this is how you say THANK YOU!!!

By screwing up you life even more.

She stands up,

Whipes away her tears,

And  screams this to the empty shadows

"I'm done with trying to help a person that obviously do not wanted to be helped"!!!

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Ok, so, the magnificent technic you've shown us so far .... you def didn't use it here, but I can understand why, you've prefered to focus 500% on the story itself, I can see it, you've done a terrific job ! I can see so much pathos here !! It looks like a genuine, LIVED (not created) story !
Very well done, loved it =D

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Okay, I like how you released out all of your pure anger on whatever situation you were going through at the moment. But there's one thing that got me distracted. You started off rhyming in the beginning, then I guess decided to let it go towards the middle and all the way to the end too!

Mistakes:
*Anytime you write a contraction please make sure to add an apostrophe*
(She can't belive after all this time, you still did what you did,) *She can't believe after all the time* Plus there's too many commas I believe.
(By screwing up you life even more.) *By screwing up your life even more*
(Whipes away her tears,) *Wipes away her tears*

Other than those errors, this is great! :)

Ashley Rivers-- Keep writing! :D

[Bridger Hall]

still at it eh... good workk ha

[Seanne Tholltree]

"I'm done with trying to help a person that obviously do not wanted to be helped"!!!-is the line that summed up the poem...nice

[Rhea752]

wow. that was rage-fueled and hateful. powerful and resentful. amazingly done!!!! :)