my high school crush

 I see you walking down the hallway,

But I wish you were walking my way.

I day dream about your deep brown eyes,

Hopeing that one day they will be looking back at mine.

I picture  being held in your arms,

I'm hopeing you wont bring my heart any harm.

But you are a dream that will never come true,

I wish you knew that I liked you.

 

Reviews

[Gerrard]

My god! Wish I had that brain of yours! Your writing is so structurally stable and solid! I can hardly suggest to work on free essays. It's so inspiring!

[Reaper]

Very reliable. Hits at my core.

[Seanne Tholltree]

i can relate to this...

But you are a dream that will never come true,

I wish you knew that I liked you.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I like this one a lot because I know who it's for;) and I can relate to it and so others can too. People can tell you to change it up but to me it is perfect just as it is. Keep it up

[paradise]

goddamn its very true guys are so stupid they can never tell when you like them loved the poem i hope he notices soon! Its a very long time sadly but great job on the poem it was everything it needed

[Lina Grey]

Very true. I'm sure nearly everyone has felt that way at some time or another. One suggestion would be to shorten line 4 (Hoping that one day they will be looking back at mine). All together a cute poem. Thank you.

[Reaching for the clouds]

Oh my.....i have certainly felt this way when i was that age.....my the feelings expressed! So powerful and intense! And those feelings make one feel alive too.

[Alex Vidmar]

great :) can go for both guys and girls. awesome.

[Lillianna Rey]

cool love it