Stay strong

You are killing her heart,

Murdering her soul,

And stealing her future.

She is broken,

And is falling apart.

she doesnt know what to do.

All she wants is for you to lover her.

To care about her.

To want her.

But she feels like you have forgoten her.

You have left her alone for to long.

Now she is getting ready to move on.

All you ever did was break her spirt.

Well she is stronger then you think.

And now its time for her to steal her future back.

And you wont have any place in it.

 

Reviews

[LittleLover]

I'm a stickler for spelling, so i figured i'd let you know :P
Line 7, i think should be love
Line 11, should be too
Line 13, should be spirit
Sorry if i seem rude, i just thought you should know
I love this poem! The flow is nice. It's unique, i love it, good job!

[MoriartyMesa]

To mirror this with a song, if that is possible, I would leave a guess to http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=43dJpNTuo80

[Le parisien]

Oh sweety :) !!
So, i loved this poem, i can see you cared a lot about the words' sounds in some verses (i even caught a rhyme somewhere in the poem) which is great !!
You "opened" the poem with the right words to make us get what you feel, the atmosphere (kill, murder, steal, all words that make us dip inside the atmosphere of frustation and sadness your feelings belong to), anyway coming to the end of the poem we see the "light at the end of the tunnel", we see a girl who is ready to get over this situation and take back control of her future, so again: I LOVED IT !! =D

[leighgreen]

Nice ending

[Tasha]

This is a wonderful write. You expressed the feelings well.

[Ashley Rivers :)]

Well, this is quite great. I can totally relate to this. The feelings were perfectly poured out, great job. :)


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Her Guardian Angel]

Absolutely amazing. Love your works. Keep me posted.

[Myself]

this is a great write.

[Taylor Jade]

This is really good. I have a friend who would be able to relate to this perfectly. I like the last three lines. They wrap everything up nicely. Good write.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Sometimes we want a certain person to care about us, while they constantly keep hurting our feelings. But, in our obsession with that person, we actually become blind and stop looking at the persons around us - persons who care about us and have been caring for as long as we know them. We may even overlook a bigger love than the one we are suffering for, love that has been there from the start.
Good write, as always.