Fall Asleep

Inspired by Rajin Cajun

fall asleep, fall asleep young man

the night is not yet o'er

the fight will soon begin

 

take no thought on the morrow

it will care for itself

but rest your weary head

it suits best for you right now

 

Tomorrow may bring to an end

the fight you're living for

or it may bring another day

to fight again once more

 

fall asleeep, fall asleep young man

the night is not yet o'er

the pain will soon begin

Reviews

[no sun]

This is well written. Feels like a nightmare warning. Has a great flow to it that seems to build intensity until the end.

[Khal Attero]

The story in this poem feels like post-apocalyptic. Enjoyable!

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here is the repeat of the theme in the last verse, and the traditional o´er, gives it a kind of 19th century feeling, simple, effective poetry, well done.

[JustLorry]

Beautiful, as always Lola :-)