As the Pain Goes Away

As the Pain Goes Away

A Poem by Ciara

As the Pain Goes Away

My hoodie comes off

I text my goodbyes

The sleeves wrap around my neck

Tighter and tighter

I tied it tight to make sure the job is done

The fair turns red then purple

The world is disappearing

Farewell here I go to the unknown

No wait I don’t want to go

No I’m not quite ready to die

Death stares me in the eye

Saying it's time to leave

Please! Please! It can’t be too late!

I just want to survive

© 2015 Ciara

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This is really good. Nice job.

Posted 2 Years Ago

this is a really good poem

Posted 2 Years Ago

"Death stares me in the eye
Saying it's time to leave
Please! Please! It can’t be too late!
I just want to survive"

I love the flow...its something I could really relate to. 😊
Nicely written!!!

Posted 2 Years Ago

I wonder, when is the right time to die. What are the requirements of a beautiful dead, but dead means the opposite of life, for I don't seek dead but its opposite. You are creating your own illusion by saying that the world is disappearing, because in the end. Thy illusion is the mirror of a heart who wavers, but by saying that you just want to survive, one has broke the illusion. No longer bounded by the chains of the wavering heart, for thy heart is now embraced by thy long sought salvation.

Good job :D

Posted 2 Years Ago

I like it!
Nice story it tells!
Keep it up!!

Posted 2 Years Ago

These lines- they just give me so much of hope! You know it tells me keep struggling till your last breath!

Posted 2 Years Ago

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That's the greatest mystery of life. Very nice lines!

Posted 2 Years Ago

Life can be such a struggle; the fight to keep above water in the restless waves. Your words remind us that we need to always struggle to seek another day. May we all have someone to pull us up when we fall into these horrid, lonely places. xo

Posted 3 Years Ago

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Sounds like lots of suspense! Grew job :)...

Posted 3 Years Ago

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Added on May 15, 2015
Last Updated on September 29, 2015

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