Passenger's Eye

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Passenger's Eye

Scenery flashes by from a car door window

And I see

Puffy, white clouds suspended in the sky

Ahead of me

 

Water towers standing tall and proud

For their town

Low farmhouses painted red and brown

Beside the garden plow

 

Semis driven by impatient drivers

Passing us up

Car bridges make a two second shadow

Fourteen feet above

 

Lush, green trees that make dense forests

In between

Miles of calm, lazy fields rich with

Freshly planted seed

 

Rusted road signs and advertisement boards

Pulling attention

From the gray and black with a yellow dividing line

Under construction

 

A generic gas station with one pump

And zero customers

Tied to the back of that truck is...

Bicycle tires?

 

Hay bales rolling down a warm, grassy

Hillside

As the last days of summer are

Passing by

 

But still hours, minutes, and seconds from our

Destination

I'll sit patiently and watch from my window of

Observation

 

 

  

Author's Note

Wrote this traveling the 14 hour drive up to vacation in Florida that I just got back from recently. Not much to do in the back of a car...

Reviews

[Mary]

What a ride! I absolutely love your keen sense of description. totallly wonderful!!! 98/98!

[RachelReaper]

thank ya!

[JiDonnelly]

You ended this one perfectly, Big ups on that ending!
"A generic gas station with one pump
And zero customers
Tied to the back of that truck is...
Bicycle tires?" I actually lol'd at that, Very hard for me to laugh at a piece.
I love the image you portray, Another amazing piece, Thank you for sharing!!

-JiDonnelly'

[Hidden Happiness]

This was a very vivid and descriptive piece of writing...it had all the aspects that you see on the road and overall was an amzing poem:-):-D.

[MOON]

Lovely a ride in the car a metaphor for life , keen eye you have.

[RachelReaper]

;)

[Brielle Cartny]

Oh wow you visited the state of Florida! That is my favourite spot to vacation. I need to go visit soon. I need to get my passport renewed.

[The dark story]

wow.you have described everything so greatly and elegantly..hmmm...got really keen eyes!!!....... i really liked the description..great work!!!!!!!

[Belinda]

I love this! It could be a ride in a car, or it could be the ride of life, just watching the world go by. I love this. bravo.