From Dusk to Dawn

From Dusk to Dawn

A Poem by Lily
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I know it is kind of short, so if you could message me on things to add to it, please do. Thank you!

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No one to be seen,
All desolate and black 
A faint glimpse of the moon
From dusk to dawn

Your worries will go away
And the secrets will come out
The worst things will happen
From dusk to dawn

© 2017 Lily



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i always feel "less is more"---
especially in poetry, when we are allowed to add our own lines between the lines...and maybe the secrets are meant to come out...to come clean in other words.
there is a faint light...faint hope...and maybe with the dawn...a new spring.
j.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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It's brief and to the point. I like it. But next time make it more poetic by employing rhyming pattern.

Posted 1 Week Ago


i always feel "less is more"---
especially in poetry, when we are allowed to add our own lines between the lines...and maybe the secrets are meant to come out...to come clean in other words.
there is a faint light...faint hope...and maybe with the dawn...a new spring.
j.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nothing wrong with short. Just keep plugging along.

Matthew

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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