Trapped beneath the ice

This is about a person who is trapped in what someone did to them and cant help but feel hate to those still happy in the world.

I'm laying in the water,

I'm underneath the ice,

Does anyone know how I got to this place?

My body is freezing,

I don't think I can move,

Please someone tell me how I got this way.

I'm stuck here just staring,

Staring at the surface so close but so far away,

I wan't to reach the surface,

I need to be able to breath,

I just need to feel something,

Something other than pain.

someone please get me out! I can't take the pain anymore!

People, there above me,

I can see them,

Living,

Moving,

Breathing.

Now all I can do is hate them,

For something someone else did to me..

Reviews

[Jenny Nelson]

A very well described and relatable piece. Strong emotion is conveyed. I personally can relate to this piece, but do find there almost always is a out we ourselves can use, even if it's just looking at a situation from a different perspective or with a different attitude. Others often help put us in a bind, even extremely difficult ones, so we have to figure how to get of it ourselves. Very nice write!

[Siertes]

I always find poems about being trapped or alone very emotional. The longing for relief, the other side of things, and powerlessness. Very nice...

wow, it keeps geting better and better. i loved the imagery. just awesome.

[Linear]

Stand back! Iv'e got a pick axe. Good poetry, must be cold down there come up i have a nice warm towel

[♥Chloe-The-Zombi..]

very good...there is a couple of spelling mistakes, but you can fix those up :) i like