Don't be Late

Weigh me down, I feel you there.

Breathing cool and pressured air.

Saw you coming slowly on

Closing in, dark curtains drawn.

 

Do I walk, but can I sleep?

Thoughts rise quick,

From underneath.

 

Familiar cloud I can’t shake forth,

Point my compass shy of north.

For you know well, or is it me?

How long can this ride truly be?

 

There you are again, again.

For I descend the lion’s den.

Knowing, willing, wondering.

What hell has spread its darkened wing?

 

Oh dark cloud, drench my downturned face.

I dropped my coat in fervent chase.

The curtains close, it’s no use now,

So exit, silent, none to bow.

 

But what if I just sleep today?

Leave the sick, the quick, the fray?

Would you come and lie with me?

Sing to me and leave me be?

And when the clock, it gets to eight,

Dress me, tell me.

Don’t be late.

Reviews

[Corrupthoughts]

Considerably simple word choices but the entirety of it comes off as far more then that. It flows well, the stanzas are not overly long by any means by the bulk of it all swirls on the mind for a little while, finding a place to settle. Stanza 5 is probably my fav and where I can see the most emotion, erupting almost on frustration. A good piece.

[Saraplenty]

your writing is captivating.

[Alex Zynder]

classical and identifiable at the same time. loved it.

[Adam :P]

awesome poem loved it.

[Jody Medland]

This is much more my type of poem. Short, witty, snappy.

I love writing of this pace. I like it a lot! :D

[Christopher.Holmberg]

Great composition!

[♥(heatherawesome..]

this is a really awesome write i love it so keep it up

[YourXArtist]

this was interesting. :) and very good.

[Dream Weaver]

Magnificent writing Lindsay, The rhyming was tight and
the imagery weaved an enchanting story...Loved it.

[Emily B]

so much like a dream