Shattered Strings

A metaphor for having your love and trust destroyed.

I am the crystal puppet

Stitched together with love-filled lies

My head hangs low as my body remains aloft

I am immobile without your familiar touch.

Light reflects off my every surface

Casting soft rainbow shadows within.

Trusting in my transparency,

I allow you deep in my centre

Where lies a red glass heart

Throbbing with life while the body stays mute.

The sunlight caresses my cast

Channelled through every facet

Warming me when I could otherwise seem cold

Filling my shell with luminescence.

Yet somehow, the strings which allowed my flight

Tighten.

Sunlight corrupts, causing my face to crack

And the fire in my heart to split.

My strings, the forgiving promisers of life

Turn to vipers.

I fall.

Crystal splinters, fractures, breaks.

The ruby within my chest escapes, shatters.

I lie, in the remnants of my body.

I wonder

As to why I was allowed to disintegrate.

Somehow resisting the urge

To use the crystal shards to trace lines deep through my soul,

Lines crimson as the heart you dropped.

You leave me in pieces.

And yet I cry for the strings,

Yearn for the comfort in barbed wire.

Sunlight dissolves so the moon may not glow.

The moonrose wilts,

Reflecting red from the glitter left on the floor,

The dust with the missing strings.

~ 21.4.12

Author's Note

What happens when you find out that your partner of 4 years has been lying to you and manipulating you for a year.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"You leave me in pieces.
And yet I cry for the strings,
Yearn for the comfort in barbed wire.
Sunlight dissolves so the moon may not glow.
The moon rose wilts,
Reflecting red "
That is some good poetry...:)

[Rocans]

This is a very well written piece. I like your use of words which conjure up a powerful image. The overall concept was great. Good write

[mikl paul]

'Throbbing with life while the body stays mute.' this line is excellent.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you so much!

[Coyote Poetry]

"I fall.
Crystal splinters, fractures, breaks.
The ruby within my chest escapes, shatters.
I lie, in the remnants of my body.
I wonder"
Powerful description allowed the reader to fall in the emotion of the poem. I read the poem a few times for the pleasure of the language. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

And thank you so much for the wonderful review! I'm honoured that you liked it so much you read it a few times :)

[Tim]

Very creatively done with a large amount of details and images. Your metaphor stands out and your end depicts your overall feeling on the matter of a shattered heart. Good writing.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you greatly... That's a very kind review; your words are very encouraging.

[Tim]

You're welcome.

[Crazy Cat Man]

I enjoyed reading this piece. very gothic description of betrayal. such a shame u had to go through this in order to write a wonderful piece like this

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you so much! I take that as a huge compliment because gothic is the genre I dearly aim towards! Thank you for those kind words and understanding, too.

[Jade-UH]

It's beautiful. I feel as if you have spoken from my own heart. I recently went through something similar.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you very much. While I'm not glad to hear you've gone through something similar, I'm glad I gave you something to relate to.

[kayla]

I absolutely love this. It's highly descriptive, emotional, and beautiful.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you, that does mean a huge lot to me.

[Alicia Beavis]

Beautiful imagery and emotion just pours from every word. The way you phrase things is just a pleasure to read too!

Often, from pain comes the greatest poems. You've got skill!

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you so much! Your words are very sweet, I'm honoured for such praise.