Locked Up

I hope this makes you question and think deeper into the meaning.

Locked up, 
Housed behind iron bars, 
Brick walls surround.

The keys
Occupy the corner,
Untouched.

The lock,
Mangled.

________________________________________

mental illness awareness jewelry

Author's Note

Hope you enjoyed the reading. Any and all criticism is appreciated. Take Care! Stay Strong! :)

Reviews

[Vria P Crow]

INTRODUCTION

1. Concise
2. Provoking
3. Grim

BODY

FIRST STANZA:

1. The imagery is stunning.
2. The vocabulary is stunning.
3. The concept is stunning.

The feeling of being trapped in the ward is something we feel "literally" and "metaphorically."

1. Literally: The actual "setting" of a psychiatric unit is something frightening in the horror sense.
- Feelings include
(1) Isolation
(2) Trapped
(3) Exile

2. Metaphorically: "We are a prison of our own mind," said an inmate I know.

CONCLUSION

1. I feel as though I am preaching to the choir :P
2. I feel as though I am living vicariously through the poem.
3. I feel as though you are a talented, young woman.

Happy writing to you!

[Blue Belle]

Thank you so much! It's interesting to see that you have interpreted being in a psychiatric ward because my intent was just the 'mind'. When looking at, or reading art, people interpret it differently, and I think that's pretty cool.

[Vria P Crow]

I honestly thought as much:D I have actually lived part of it. To be honest, I just left the hospital after I committed myself.

Thank you for your response:D

[Zap-the-awesome]

Let me hand you a cutting torch. That's my thing!! XD great work.

[Blue Belle]

Thanks, I'm not sure that will work either.

[oli the outcast]

even though its short, something about it is, like, haunting. i love it. its absolutely great. i'm not exactly sure how to word it. (also i've looked at some of your previous writing, and you are very talented! keep writing!)

[Blue Belle]

Thank you so much! :)

[Alone In A Crowd]

Short, simple, selective. I love your decriptions and to the point, yet technical and clever word positioning.

[Blue Belle]

Thanks you so much! :)

[Chris]

Sometimes its just hard to be any one, hard to be any where, hard to have a place... seeming impossible to catch a breath or a break or even a smile. Mirrors lie. Friends are few and far between. ...and its like you reach a point you can't even cry. But - always a but... you can still help someone else so they don't have to be alone where you were or have been. Nothing makes the pain right but helping lessens the hurt.

[I Am Svetlana]

Hm, the mind can be a pretty harsh and dangerous place, but at least it helps fuel our inspiration and ideas for writing. Our minds can make us do stupid things at times, make us blackout even and not remember certain things. I get like that when I get angry sometimes, I blackout and don't remember being mad at all or who I even got mad at. It's scary, but anything is possible in your mind.

[Ravyne Hawke]

We are definitely locked up in our own minds, but sometimes I think my key is missing altogether and so is my lock.. my medication keeps me compliant. Great poem.. very thought-inducing.

[Blue Belle]

Thanks you