Stitched

Stitched

A Poem by LivingDeath

Stitched across the fragments of a thousand broken hearts
Over splintered reveries that refuse to fall apart,
Stitched through night and darkest days
These ashen thoughts of searing grey.

Implode the nitroglycerin 
Infused by crimson hearts within,
Through these visceral seas of time
Beats a moment unstained by grime. 

What now is eternal will discover new truth
Our souls are ablaze like the fountain of youth,
Death by these miles, sweet crucifixion
Forever entrapment for a world with no sin. 

© 2012 LivingDeath



Author's Note

LivingDeath
Written using two lists of 12 random words. One from one of the closest friends, Aoelaigh (sharkapilliar) and the other from myself. The first words of both lists had to be made into the first line, the second words for the second line etc. This is the result.
Re-read it a couple times and let me know what you think it means to you :)

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As always, darkly and sublimely written.
Well done.
Thank you for allowing me to read :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Love the vocabulary, and I love the flow and feeling of the piece. Great write!

-Bliss

Posted 4 Years Ago


i like your strong vocabulary words it makes the poems sound beautiful like a rhythm& it lures the reader in tapping along to its beat ^.^
something i've been trying to do with my poems but have achieved no success maybe i should learn a thing or two from you

Posted 4 Years Ago


I love this piece! I'm absolutely entranced by your work, and this piece is certainly no exception. The first stanza is wonderful, and it draws the reader in. I love this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


this is very symbolic
... clever in the use of figurative
=]

Posted 4 Years Ago


I would say that it seems that this poem has many meanings. Of course a meaning for the reader that is quite personal, and a meaning that it sometimes all too clear. I think that this meaning here is something coming from how the world is really crippled and broken. The world is without consequences most of the time, and we go about our days without any type of true punishments done. It also sounds like a really dark kind of love poem. Just my weird way of thinking, I suppose. This is a very dark poem for me, but still very good. Really loved it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


the readability of this poem is remarkable! it has a steady beat and a perfect rhyme scheme. rhyming two phrases i have never heard rhyme before shows how much effort and work you put into your diction.
"Death by these miles, sweet crucifixion
Forever entrapment for a world with no sin. "

while this poem seems dark, i say this is a poem filed with hope and longing.

very very nice and thank you for sharing!! :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Great use of words. I like the word "Stitched". Would be nice to be able to sew the wounds up forever. I like the flow of thoughts and the positive ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago



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LivingDeath

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