What Have I Become

I wrote this straight from the heart, no fake emotions.

What have I become 

but the one to break my heart,

I always climb so high

just to slowly fall apart.

You'd think I'd know by now

to stop allowing pain,

but when I'm my only friend

than what is there to gain?

My heart is wrapped in barbs 

pressed against my  soul,

so every time it beats

shatters a deeper hole.  

I've hurt myself before

to see if I was dead,

but life became a river

that thick and golden red.

I write these songs of sadness

so I can cry alone at night,

I try to bear the pain

but it's always a constant fight.

What have I become 

but the one to break my heart,

I always climb so high

just to slowly fall apart.

Reviews

[Luciole]

I'm completely in LOVE with this poem. Again, I find it so easy to relate to. Thanks for sharing!

[DreyaArt]

sadly beautiful

[A Risen Heroine.]

Wow...
This is so powerful...
It makes me want to cry, because... I can relate...

"What have I become
but the one to break my heart,
I always climb so high
just to fall apart."

I love that stanza...
It kinda speaks to me..

You did such a great job on this, thank you for sharing.

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Vanessa]

oh, my. its great. POWERFUL AND STRONG

[The Wave]

Wow.
Really enjoyed reading this piece. It came across very honest and genuine...
The rhyme or flow did not seem forced at all and I just find this to be one of my favorites from you.
Good job.

[Jane Doe]

This poem flows almost perfectly, the words just pouring off the page. I like it and I can relate to it, good job.

[Chelsea.]

i only see one little nitpick thing. in the last line of the 3rd stanza, it says "shatters a new and deeper hole." I read it with an "it" in front of 'shatters'. it just sounded better to me :o . Anyway. I love your writing . you are an amazing and talented writer. I get how you feel. The imagery is great in this piece.

[Bette]

this was beaultiful, wonderfuly sad. well done

[Missing Part]

very good job

[Alex W]

Very powerful. I used to feel like this, but I just thought 'F**k it, i'm gonna enjoy myself before I f**k up and die." and to an extent it works in blocking out any pain.

Well done on writing this, must have been a bit of a test to write it.