I Sit I Cry

To that someone close that died the other day. I'll always remember you.

Hold me down

my wings they cry,

I beg for you

to let me fly.

These dark bars

that hide all hope,

they hold me back

like unbreakable rope.

Give me peace

take my love,

I'm here below 

while you're above.

In the clouds

of heaven sky,

while you look down

I sit I cry.

Reviews

[Ashley]

aww i love this. thanks for entering my contest

[Felicity Winter]

Awe I love this, great emotion. Keep up the great work *hugs* (haha sorry I like hugging people)

[FireFly15]

Beautiful. Everytime I read something of yours I think 'Theres no way he could write something better than this!' And then you prove me wrong over, and over again.

100/100

[Lovely Lady]

Keep emoting, keep writing, you are gifted.
~!♥~

[A Stranger's Tale]

Simply powerful

[Blue tailed kite]

The imagery was very nicely done....

In the clouds
of heaven sky,
while you look down
I sit I cry.

very touching, great write.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this is amazing. I love the flow it work out perfectly. I agree with Guitar Girl. She is absolutely right. Thanks for sharing. :)

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

Dude this is really good. Couldn't be any better. It's also a good way of saying you'l remember someone.

[Theresa]

Brought a tear to my since it hit close to home for me. I loved the last stanza and it makes me think if they are looking down on us would they want us to be crying? Another great piece.

[Katie]

Ah, this really hit home for me. I just lost a close friend due to cancer. This was beautiful piece. Great job.