The Sorrows Of the Sea

The Sorrows Of the Sea

A Poem by Lizzy Brookes

Won't you stay, 
I'm going down.
Sinking into a world 
that is hard to get out of.
For a fleeting moment I thought 
you'd steer back to me and pull me upright.
Keep me safe, 
watch the world drift by. 

Begging you 
just won't do.
The storm won't settle,
But Ill pierce a hole 
just big enough for the cold wind 
to seep in 
and then I won't need you anymore.
And I'll continue 
sailing along.. 

You'll see.

© 2014 Lizzy Brookes


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Going to be fun to do...but let's have at it...

Won't you stay,
I'm going down.
Sinking into a world
that is hard to get out of.
For a fleeting moment I thought
you'd steer back to me and pull me upright.
Keep me safe,
watch the world drift by.

Begging you
just won't do.
The storm won't settle,
But Ill pierce a hole
just big enough for the cold wind
to seep in
and then I won't need you anymore.
And I'll continue
sailing along..

You'll see.


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lizzy Brookes

10 Years Ago

I love it, thank you! Ill change it now :)
Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

You're welcome...makes it choppy and gives an effect...glad you liked it...



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Going to be fun to do...but let's have at it...

Won't you stay,
I'm going down.
Sinking into a world
that is hard to get out of.
For a fleeting moment I thought
you'd steer back to me and pull me upright.
Keep me safe,
watch the world drift by.

Begging you
just won't do.
The storm won't settle,
But Ill pierce a hole
just big enough for the cold wind
to seep in
and then I won't need you anymore.
And I'll continue
sailing along..

You'll see.


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lizzy Brookes

10 Years Ago

I love it, thank you! Ill change it now :)
Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

You're welcome...makes it choppy and gives an effect...glad you liked it...
as I read into the lines...
the sorrow as with your title...
just flows into the read...
and yet the ending conclusion...
has a passive effect...
is there a reason ---
some lines are rolling off the page...
or is that do intentional --- for a purpose...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lizzy Brookes

10 Years Ago

The structure is supposed to be chopping, like the sea, all over the place... and it dies down at th.. read more

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Added on March 5, 2014
Last Updated on March 5, 2014
Tags: sorrow, sea, sinking, world, safe, storm, settle, hole, cold, wind

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Lizzy Brookes
Lizzy Brookes

Brisbane, Australia, Australia



About
I am a uni student in australia, changed degrees so many times and still trying to find out who I am and what I want to be in this life. more..

Writing