Memoir de Narcissus

Memoir de Narcissus

A Story by Shaun Gurmin
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A story about the inner ice cavern.

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Rigid and cold, I sat in the ice cave, surrounded by crystals: how easily I could see through them, their emptiness, merely reflecting what they were not.

 

I searched, longing for warmth, longing for substance. In a crevice, I found something, radiant, a burning piece of amber. It wasn´t transparent like the others. It was rich with colour, rich with power. I sat there and gazed, at its beauty, its inner universe of galaxies, of yellows and oranges, bursting within.

 

Something started to appear. Slowly, I could see. There I was: happy, bright, glowing, warm. Enchanted, I wondered if this was my reflection. But with time, the fiery gem darkened, and became as cold and blank as the other stones. Desperately, I ran from rock to rock, cavern to cavern, in search of myself.

 

I knew I was different from those crystal caskets. I knew I had substance. I saw it: I saw the light inside. Wanting to see it again, I ventured into forbidden land, beyond the mouth of the ice cave.

 

Outside, the bright skies scorched me. Gradually, I felt myself tiring, until I could no longer walk. I glanced down and noticed droplets, melting and merging, on the ground before me. I looked into the pool.

 

Sparkling, glowing, refracting colours, I saw myself. I was beautiful: yellows, blues, greens, and reds.

 

Weakening, I dropped towards my reflection, tears fleeing my seared surface. Disturbing the charm, agitating the clarity, the final drop rippled the water. Then, I saw that the beauty and colours, were just phantom refractions, from a melting crystal mirror.

© 2018 Shaun Gurmin


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First of all... this was amazing!
You wrote a really descriptive story and I could see all of this in my mind as I also do when reading Harry Potter! :) You sort of shocked me in the end! I... I... just didnt expect that to happen!
This story was emotional... engaging... thought provoking... and most of all POWERFUL :)



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shaun Gurmin

7 Years Ago

Wow, what a kind review! Thank you very much Mr Writer.
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

No problemm :)



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Great imagery, however I am having a little trouble understanding the message you're trying to get across. Do you plan to add to this piece?

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Impressive - really descriptive and visual provoking

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The imagery here is ahhhmazing! Fabulous piece! Thank you for sharing! xxx

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The story's description was very fluid, smooth, and quite alluring. You're very good. Like the others, I was surprised at the end! Overall you wrote a really good piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shaun Gurmin

7 Years Ago

Thank you Pulsatio.
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Taz
This put a new meaning to rose colored glasses, this was a really descriptive story, very impressive I loved it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shaun Gurmin

7 Years Ago

Hello Taz, thank you very much for your response. I am happy you enjoyed it.
Taz

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Pure brilliance. Wow. I seriously do not know what to say

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shaun Gurmin

7 Years Ago

Hello Daphne, thank you very much for your kind review. I´m happy you liked it.
First of all... this was amazing!
You wrote a really descriptive story and I could see all of this in my mind as I also do when reading Harry Potter! :) You sort of shocked me in the end! I... I... just didnt expect that to happen!
This story was emotional... engaging... thought provoking... and most of all POWERFUL :)



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shaun Gurmin

7 Years Ago

Wow, what a kind review! Thank you very much Mr Writer.
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

No problemm :)
I was engrossed too much in this write. You really created a nice imagery with your words. And the last line of self realization hit pretty hard to me..

I enjoyed reading this. Great piece, Shaun! 👍😊

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shaun Gurmin

7 Years Ago

Thank you Yumna.
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

You're welcome 😊

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Added on March 22, 2017
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Tags: narcissism, imaginary, disillusioned, deception, dissapointment

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Shaun Gurmin
Shaun Gurmin

Wolverhampton, West Midlands, United Kingdom



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