Dark Day

Dark Day

A Poem by Lori Brown Boniciolli
"

Weather - Fall

"


                                                              Dark Day

                                                  Outside, it is gray again.

                                                  The grounded leaves are rotting,

                                                  and naked trees knife the pregnant sky.


                                                  The wind roars warning,

                                                  stirring the heart of the wounded wood


                                                  which cannot be revived.   

© 2016 Lori Brown Boniciolli



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I agree with Burleygirl...

That line, "and naked trees knife the pregnant sky", is quite nice. Well done.

Posted 5 Months Ago


This little vignette seems to drone on with unfancy observations described in straightforward terms, which creates a demonstration of how this can feel. No multi-syllabic adjective pile-ups, but just sticking to the simple one-foot-in-front-of-the-other march that's necessary on dark days. Everything is intensely-stated for imagery, but this is a stand-out: "naked trees knife the pregnant sky." This may be about autumn, but it could be a metaphor for depression, too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


You played with words which ended in a very vivid, sharp and solid piece.
The wind roars warning, stirring the heart of the wounded tree - WHAT A LINE.

Brilliant.

Mark.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Great description of the Fall. The Fall, time for our world of nature to rest and sleep. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


'.. naked trees knife the pregnant sky.'

Words designed to paint or play amazing images and, they do so - beautifully.

Posted 1 Year Ago


of course we are always telling our story, but not to worry about wounds, healing is our strongest suit, and our revival is the song of hosannas

Posted 1 Year Ago


That is a very deep poem:) I really enjoyed it thank you for sharing:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Compact and powerful writing. I especially liked your phrase
'naked trees knife the pregnant sky.'
Your images will stay with me for some time.
z.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sharp personification here. This humanizes nature herself in a vivid way. I like the imagery.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lori Brown Boniciolli

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading it.

Sincerely

Lori
Dark, and nicely written. The descriptions are drawn with a perfect-sharp nib. Vivid and weighty writing.

Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lori Brown Boniciolli

2 Years Ago

Thank-you, Charlie.

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