Without

A Book by Katelyn

Everything seems fine. But isn't that always how it starts? Unexpected, unknown events causing your life to change in the blink of an eye.

Chapters

© 2014 Katelyn

Author's Note

Please ignore grammar errors while reading but comment how to fix them below. Also, please tell me what you think of the story as a whole. Thanks :)

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eallen

You story was captivating and made me want to read more. You have a real facility with description and interspersing exposition with imagery. However, I’m already two pages into the story and I don’t know what the tension/theme is. A good rule of thumb is maybe to start in medias res (in the middle of things). Maybe have her open her eyes to this stranger standing over her and have him relate how he found her and brought her to the hospital.

On grammar issues: comma splices, etc.; a good resource is Grammar Bytes—you can Google it.