"Tramp"

A dialogue between sober me vs drunk me

Watch as her face drips, dipping into the reflected pool of eagerness.

Look upon her and see the breadth of her vulgarity!

For she is made eager by your sanctified salivations-

Wasted and wretched and woefully lost-

She’s a trickling tip toe desperate to dance.

Watch as her buckling collisions beg of her crumbling tides to perform!

Only served best when she’s dainty, demented- and deliciously deformed.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' Watch as her buckling collisions beg of her crumbling tides to perform! ~~ Only served best when she’s dainty, demented- and deliciously deformed.'

To observe self so acutely is both miracle and curtain closer.. You use language so powerfully, see home truths, phsycial weaknes, allure, the performance. Your poetry is raw fantasy come true, Lucia.. brava!

[Lucia]

thank you! I'm a sucker for alliteration and rhyme sometimes it holds me back other times it clicks

[emmajoy]

I'm a sucker at making typos, forgive (physical) Am am truly impressed by what your response says - it does click, believe me. :)

[Thepensiveplayer]

Interesting poem. I chuckled a bit because it reminds me of battling different sides of myself. Should you mesh them together or change up at the right time and place for your own goals. Its like I can visualize looking at two reflections of myself in a mirror, one coated in light and the other in dark. Its a puzzling case, but your great as you are at the end of the day. keep writing and growing.

[Coyote Poetry]

I love how you used the words. You made me believe every thoughts and emotion in the poetry.
"Only served best when she’s dainty, demented- and deliciously deformed."
The above line. Hard and perfect. Thank you Lucia for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cookee korczynski]

wow this is very powerful