Intoxicated Love

a poem about a first encounter.

 

Her golden hair

                     Smells of cinnamon.

                          I am transfixed by her soft skin.

 

She holds my hand.

                      Our fingers connect like

                     jigsaw pieces.

 

She whispers into my left ear,

her lime blossom perfume glides up my nose.

 

The crowded bar that we are in suddenly

                                   burst into green flames. I see and hear

                                                               No one apart the women sitting in front of me.

 

I am inside a vacuum of a green haze,

                                            Surrounded by the aromas

                              Of lime blossom, cinnamon

                                              

   and the sweet pungent feminine smell    

                                                        Of a woman.

 ©LukeRitta

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like "fingers connect like jigsaw puzzles"

that is wonderful...i like the entire mood of this piece...and there is such a beautiful truth in a first meeting with someone like this...the rest of the world just gets shut out...and she is the only thing we see, hear, feel...that is it.

nice scenario painted here...

jacob

[zainul]

Golden encounter with perfumed romance.

[Vanessa Pavelock]

I find your use of the color green to be very original and compelling. I love how the form, language, and diction all add to the intoxicating feel of the poem.

[thementalscribe]

So visual, I can smell it.

[Corset]

the senses are so wonderfully engaged in this delightful expression of love! Such lovely poems I am reading today! well done!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

An ideal and v fragrant female indeed.....I felt virtually convinced, as if engaged in a vivid aromatic romance...so well put together almost edible and I don't feel warrants further editing.

[Allie]

Very touching and personal experience. You captured this situation so nice and neat like. Great imagery.

[EMMIE]

Romantic and flow is on point

[Lovely Lady]

Sweet. I enjoyed this simple yet loving description of my own gender!
~lovely♥lady~

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine piece of writing, like the compact, powerful imagery, and the way you break up the phrases, and the unexpected and original language you use. Good work.