Hollow

Hollow

Hollow heart, hollow words,

split your feelings into thirds.

The pieces are empty, that’s no surprise,

I could see it through your translucent eyes.

You say that you love me, your words are all false,

I can feel your hollow lies beneath your hollow pulse.

So walk your hollow self, far far away,

for it won’t be long until you decay.

For there’s little of you, and less of your love,

You’ll just fly away like a mourning dove.

‘Cuz your hollow tears mean nothing to me,

they just fall as the rain into the sea.

And if you should fall, you’ll just float like a log,

hollowly into the mist and the fog.

Until you get tired and search for some land,

you’ll hollowly wash up onto some sand.

There your empty soul will die ever so slowly,

because hollow you are and hollow you’ll be.

Reviews

[Scottlehem]

An exquisite piece as I hear your voice managing your anger. Cats like her have rules that govern their behavior instead of letting thoughts and feelings get the better of them. I really like the lines:

"Cuz your hollow tears mean nothing to me,
they just fall as the rain into the sea."

Write On

[Francis Voltier]

I like this, It's very personal and fierce. The resolution you've found after heartbreak. Don't know if this is personal experience or otherwise, but it definitely seems like a personal experience.. if so, good job lulu.

[JustLorry]

Beautifully done. Potent but never overly powerful.
ps...hope you dont mind me pointing out line four, looks like it should have read i could see it, apologies if wrong.