Seize the Day

Seize the Day

A Poem by Brittany Zedalis



radio playing, laughter transforms

into screams, metal crunching and

closing in, a flash of red hair,

or is it blood

 

the smell of dirt and smoke,

hands pull me from the wreckage,

covered in crimson water that

is not my own

 

            searching eyes and choked shrieks,

            where are they, where are-

 

face-down, still, twisted into

unnatural positions, unconscious,

the deafening screams are my

own, falling to my knees

 

helpless, seeing red but not in

anger, somewhere an ambulance

arrives, parents and bystanders

watch with unwavering fear

 

            they scream for their mother, and

            she is not breathing anymore-

 

uncontrollable shaking, a breath is

finally taken, but the battle is not won,

rushing, bright lights, tears and mud

staining my cheeks

 

she can only see shadows, his neck

is broken, another scream, a phone goes

off in the next room, a man in uniform

takes my hand and doesn't let go

 

~Mad Swirl 2014~

~People Are Amazing Online E-Zine 2014~






© 2017 Brittany Zedalis



Author's Note

Brittany Zedalis


This is about a wreck I was in during October 2010.

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dan
Luna, This is so gripping, I felt like I was one of the onlookers praying for the best result. I must compliment you on your outstanding descriptive profile of the scene. About 6 months ago my wife totaled our car and should have died, but walked away without a scratch. I'm so sorry that there were casualties in your accident, and I don't know if survivor's guilt came into play, but just thank God you made it. Powerful read, thank you for sharing it with all of us. take care...dan

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. There were no casualties in the end thankfully; everyone survived. But one of.. read more
dan

2 Years Ago

Thankfully you walked away instead of riding a gurney. I know my wife is still traumatized after 6 m.. read more



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A terrible accident that you are able to write about, so vividly, driven by emotions that could only be captured by one who survived. Sometimes we are unable to write so clearly about past trauma but you have done so quite skilfully. I was in an accident more than twenty years ago and walked away from it without much physical damage but I have never written about it. Good work!

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Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

I'm sure I will be. I barely had any support from anyone to get through it, I pretty much did it on .. read more
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2 Years Ago

Yes, indeed... quite adaptable you appear to be... a very good skill to have in this life!
Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

With a life like I've had, adaptation is the only option.
Has the madness found you yet? If not then this is pretty damn close and if so then this is just stumbling, amazingly good. You've taken the horrid and sudden details and turned them inside out for this reader. Almost five years passed and yet I am slammed and in the car. I am worn in every sense over the way you weave back and forth, in and out with continuation of narrative mirroring the shock of this terrible experience. And yet here you are alive and writing so very well. Well if you need, you may borrow some of my madness but to me you seem more than just a little capable. This is wonderful. Thanks Luna~

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Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

After the nightmares I've had the past couple of nights, I'm sure the madness I need is just around .. read more
Perdition

2 Years Ago

Nightmares? Corners? You ARE getting closer. Now once I hear a cello things are really gong to..OH.... read more
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dan
Luna, This is so gripping, I felt like I was one of the onlookers praying for the best result. I must compliment you on your outstanding descriptive profile of the scene. About 6 months ago my wife totaled our car and should have died, but walked away without a scratch. I'm so sorry that there were casualties in your accident, and I don't know if survivor's guilt came into play, but just thank God you made it. Powerful read, thank you for sharing it with all of us. take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. There were no casualties in the end thankfully; everyone survived. But one of.. read more
dan

2 Years Ago

Thankfully you walked away instead of riding a gurney. I know my wife is still traumatized after 6 m.. read more
Pain is conveyed to the point of almost understanding something you can't possibly understand unless you experience it yourself. Great job.



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Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you, JD!
This piece is gutwrenching.
The imagery is just coaching.
Wonderful Penmanship.

Thank you for sharing.
-Angad

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Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
With every turn of each line..Heart wrenching .. I love how you closed your poem with handholding..
I am glad, that you are able to express yourself after such an ordeal.. Blessings to you Luv.. you're a strong one !

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Brittany Zedalis

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Renée

3 Years Ago

( : It was my privilege to read
A very powerful and moving piece of reality.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

3 Years Ago

Thank you!
Damn girl, you really put quite the emotional spin of such a tragic loss in tornado like fashion.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

3 Years Ago

Yeah, I definitely did. Thank you ^-^
I can relate to this, but I won't to go too deeply into it cuz I don't wanna make this review about me...this is incredibly haunting and intense, with some truly chilling imagery, especially 'crimson water that is not my own'...sadly, I'd say one must have to endure such an awful experience to be able to write about it with this kind of jaw-dropping effect...phenomenal piece, and congrats on the magazine appearance :)


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much ^-^ It took me 4 years to write about the accident because I couldn't really find .. read more
Oh, Brittany...this is heartbreaking. I am so sorry. Life is indeed, precious, and needs to be cherished every day. Blessings to you.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

3 Years Ago

Thank you. It took me 3 years to get through most of it, but I did, and so has everyone else involve.. read more

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