Twilight Stars

Twilight Stars

A Poem by Brittany Zedalis
"

one of those that just spilled out.

"

my thoughts drift away

to the soft brown hues

of your hair beneath sunlight,

times

when your best friend

was down the hall to the right,

and those

nights

full of laughter

as campfire sparks

singed my hair, secret

moments

where the rumble of your voice

sung in my ear and

your intoxicated bedroom eyes-

I touch your scar and remember

not all scars can be seen, but

the beat of your heart

against my bare skin reminds me

we are not broken souls beneath

twilight stars, but

one soul beating with a singular heart

awaiting the oncoming dawn


~Dead Snakes 2014~




© 2017 Brittany Zedalis



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I love it. Especially that you hand wrote it and showed it. I cannot for the life of me write the way I want to with pen and paper. It's such a different method. Probably due to my intense impatience.

Two hearts underneath twilight stars, rhythmic as one.. it doesn't get more lovely, really.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Much appreciated, Brian.



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Its brilliantly written...i love the title...its romantic and inspirational....excellent writing... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


I love it. Especially that you hand wrote it and showed it. I cannot for the life of me write the way I want to with pen and paper. It's such a different method. Probably due to my intense impatience.

Two hearts underneath twilight stars, rhythmic as one.. it doesn't get more lovely, really.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Much appreciated, Brian.
I forgot I left a comment on this one. I love everything about it! It pulls my romantic heart strings and my memories of college fun, bonfires and handsome boys with rumbling voices and mysterious smiles. Great writing, Luna!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you! I like knowing this is one people come back to and read again.
Bright Ocean Star

2 Years Ago

You know I can't resist anything with 'stars' in the title! Ha! :)
oh this was nice :)
I love the idea of secret moments ... like nobody can come in ha

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thanks for reading this one, Richard. I like the idea too, haha.
Richard

2 Years Ago

you're welcome :)
really nice emotive raw piece of work

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Millzy.
very poetic. Play on words was very rich. I LOVED the ending stanza. This piece showed allot of restraint. It had the right amount everything that makes a poem memorable. Really nice work!
Thanks for sharing.
WB

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Wow thank you so much for such a nice review!
interesting write it was a pleasure to read this beautiful poem thank you for sharing
broken girl

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

And thanks for stopping by.
child of God

2 Years Ago

my pleasure :)
How well written. It's flow is continuous from beginning to end. I like the pause at the hyphen. I espcilly like the insight of his invisible scars and the way she touches them :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Aw, thank you very much for stopping by and leaving this kind review! ^-^
Very well done, Luna. This one is romantic and touching. I loved every line. It was strong from start to finish. Thank you for sharing this one with us. I loved the line that 'not every scar can be seen'. People need to remember this. It is so important. Thanks again.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you! :)

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Tags: love, intoxicated, thoughts, drift, singing, campfire, best friend

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💎💜💙 Mommy to my Evangeline Lilly 💙💜💎 My name is Brittany, but I prefer going by Luna. I'm a married 25 year old mother of one adorable litt.. more..

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