Electric Mind

Electric Mind

A Poem by Brittany Zedalis
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Just a quick one that I had to write down.

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Electricity flowing through

Intoxicated veins,

I wait, and ponder,

Over life’s simplicities, and the dreams

That burn and burst through

Our constantly wandering souls,

The cracked ground beneath

Our feet, dry and barren,

But in the distance,

A spark


by Brittany Zedalis in Dead Snakes Poetry 


© 2017 Brittany Zedalis



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I can kind of see where you're coming from. I understand it like this, and please correct me if I'm wrong. You're confused over the simple things in life and the things that don't make sense. Its like your soul is wandering aimlessly and it feels like there is nothing on this earth that can set you free from the prison you're in. You can almost taste your freedom, but its just so far away and your mind is fading farther and farther away from reasoning and reality. I'm probably wrong, but that's what I am getting out of it. Let me know!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

1 Year Ago

You're pretty much spot on (: I wrote this during a time when my life took a turn into a direction I.. read more



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Nice to read it many years later still the charm remains

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

3 Months Ago

Yeah, this is one of my favorites of my own. I'm glad you like it. Thank you for reading.
Very good! I enjoyed reading very much!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

3 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad. :)
I can kind of see where you're coming from. I understand it like this, and please correct me if I'm wrong. You're confused over the simple things in life and the things that don't make sense. Its like your soul is wandering aimlessly and it feels like there is nothing on this earth that can set you free from the prison you're in. You can almost taste your freedom, but its just so far away and your mind is fading farther and farther away from reasoning and reality. I'm probably wrong, but that's what I am getting out of it. Let me know!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

1 Year Ago

You're pretty much spot on (: I wrote this during a time when my life took a turn into a direction I.. read more
The end shows it is still live with it.

Short, but lively with the descriptions of it.



Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Much appreciated, Josie.
Josie E. Cook M. A.

2 Years Ago

You are welcome!
Wow, this is so magnificent and special, I can tell it came from your heart.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Yeah, it did, lol. Thank you.
Let there always be a spark eh. I enjoyed this little gem, quite a lot in fact. AGT's N

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Very glad you stopped by, Neville. Thank you.
Neville Pettitt

2 Years Ago

My pleasure entirely
"That burn and burst through
Our constantly wandering souls,
The cracked ground beneath"

Excellent...:)....................

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you, dear friend. ^-^
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)......
I love poems with a touch of philosopy. So, naturally, I loved this one as well. These 4 lines are awesome (actually made me smile.. ) -

"I wait, and ponder,
Over life’s simplicities, and the dreams
That burn and burst through
Our constantly wandering souls," - You have captured the essence of life. Dull, yet vibrant. A strange mixture of wisdom and insanity, that's life.

"But in the distance,
A spark" - That's the problem.. When there is no hope, life shows us a beacon of hope.. And when we think everything is fine, the ground beneath our feet crumbles, throwing us into complete darkness.

A really good write :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you for such a thoughtful response.
I really like the direction you went. The spark off in the distance to ignite.. well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thanks, Brian! ^-^
Brian

2 Years Ago

As deserving as ever, darling!
Such a lovely paucity of words used to describe the whole of life and the hope for a better one. A very welcome poem, Luna!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brittany Zedalis

2 Years Ago

Thank you, again! ^-^

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