Electric Mind

Just a quick one that I had to write down.

Electricity flowing through

Intoxicated veins,

I wait, and ponder,

Over life’s simplicities, and the dreams

That burn and burst through

Our constantly wandering souls,

The cracked ground beneath

Our feet, dry and barren,

But in the distance,

A spark

by Brittany Zedalis in Dead Snakes Poetry 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jesse Gonzalez]

I can kind of see where you're coming from. I understand it like this, and please correct me if I'm wrong. You're confused over the simple things in life and the things that don't make sense. Its like your soul is wandering aimlessly and it feels like there is nothing on this earth that can set you free from the prison you're in. You can almost taste your freedom, but its just so far away and your mind is fading farther and farther away from reasoning and reality. I'm probably wrong, but that's what I am getting out of it. Let me know!

[Brittany Zedalis]

You're pretty much spot on (: I wrote this during a time when my life took a turn into a direction I hadn't been expecting to go and I was feeling pretty lost and confused.

[Stonz P.]

I like the impulse to write presented metaphorically and I related to the down-to-earth quality that should be in everyone with an impulse.
You imagery is very good.
Good, layered write.

[Brittany Zedalis]

So glad you stopped by, Stonz. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Simply stated but with very complexes thinking. We all have times when our inspiration runs dry, but the muse is always right around the corner preparing to strike when you least expect it.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Now if only my muse would pop by again, haha. Thank you for reading.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You only need look no further then n your heart to find it.

[Foster Poetry]

Well done way to speak from your heart!

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you very much! (:

[Sumana Roy]

ah...we wait for that 'spark' for a lifetime...

[Brittany Zedalis]

Some do, some don't. I prefer not to wait. Thank you for dropping by :)

[Adamas]

I do agree, I feel as if it was left empty handed although it has such a daring concept. I was thinking of Electro from the Spider Man franchise as I read this.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Hahaha, that's an interesting thing to think of. Thank you for reading.

[JacobMarloe]

I'm not an experienced user but the way you describe it, I see romanticism in it. I like it. I've read all your poems hopefully I'll experience something similar upon reflection. I look forward to reading your future works.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Oh wow, all of them? Thank you! You're officially my favorite user on here now. xD

[An owl on the moon]

I love the powerful essence of your words... of this feeling... of the flowing fire of light shining through the soul.... There is more... just there in the distance... coming...

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you for this wonderful response.

[Rita L. Sev]

Ah, that spark... it's worth the travel. I like the message here.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thanks, Rita. It certainly is.

[Ruth]

I like the boldness of this, leaves me on the edge and I feel it...lovely!

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you, Poppy!

[Richard]

this is very nice :)
very imaginative and direct and good :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you, Richard.

[Richard]

welcome! ..