remember

remember

A Poem by Lydia


artwork by hessam







the stubborn wind shakes its fist at us tonight

scattering secrets on the table

a suggestion of a summer storm is whispered

while we tiptoe into the autumn of our lives

albeit under duress

i lean into your nouns

you inch closer to my disowned verbs

all the while playing peek-a-boo with that dream

we stored in our favorite denims all those years ago

yes, it was when petals were still on the flowers

the sky was always blue

and “limit” was a word we did not comprehend

but tonight the wind brings with it reality

still, somehow it’s enough for me

knowing we both remember

 


© 2017 Lydia



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This is hauntingly beautiful! Love your "s" alliteration in the beginning, as it mimics the sound of wind. My favorite line: "Limit was a word we did not comprehend" -- that just about sums up youthful longing in my book! I love the way your ending settles into a comfortable tension between the raging storm & sharing a memory (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Lydia

3 Weeks Ago

Margie, thank you for always delving into the meaning of my words. I appreciate that so much. Have.. read more
barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

Happy Halloween! *smile*



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Beautifully written, Lydia. There's a cold wind blowing here today, the kind that sends a shiver through your soul. How can 'you inch closer to my disowned verbs' sound so damned sexy. Good write.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Lydia

3 Weeks Ago

Sorry it is so cold there. You need an "arm strong heater" as my Southern friends used to say...mea.. read more
Beautifully crafted & elsewise quite breathtaking if I may be so bold. Oh' and for what it's worth, I too recall moments in time such as those you so eloquently describe and feel compelled to express my gratitude to you Lydi** for facilitating such an unexpected journey. Many thanks indeed, Neville

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Lydia

3 Weeks Ago

Happy to be the tour guide, Neville! :) Thank you so much for the review. Lydi**
This is hauntingly beautiful! Love your "s" alliteration in the beginning, as it mimics the sound of wind. My favorite line: "Limit was a word we did not comprehend" -- that just about sums up youthful longing in my book! I love the way your ending settles into a comfortable tension between the raging storm & sharing a memory (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Lydia

3 Weeks Ago

Margie, thank you for always delving into the meaning of my words. I appreciate that so much. Have.. read more
barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

Happy Halloween! *smile*
Absolutely stellar, powerful poem Lydi. Honest, raw, deeply moving vignette- the texture of a relationship well- expressed. Past and present, smiles and tears, and memories that are the enduring foundation. Beautiful imagery- “the stubborn wind shakes its fist at us tonight”- yes, but we love anyway. Great poem!

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Thank you very much, Annette...you really "got" it. Lydi**
what a keeper Lydia..this is ...well..precious ..the time you capture in the language touches me instantly .."...stored in our favorite denims..." oh what a line says i!! i still have some dear dear friends from those days and would love to send this on to them if that's ok .. with the pic ... i rarely even think of the points thing but from time to time i just have to emphasize how much i enjoy a read ..so giving you 100 ..but know it is more than that ..
E.
ps. and to my youngest son...i have a painting of his that the one you picked resembles ...

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Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

of course dear friend .. i copied and pasted just as you have written and shared it ..artists name a.. read more
Lydia

1 Month Ago

Thank you once again, my friend....and your son is lucky to have you in his life.
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

i think i'm pretty lucky...and you are very kind to say such a thing..peace and joy dear friend
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Skilled yet emotional use of language around past, metaphors blowing in the breeze, companisons of then and now keenly remembered. Tis life at Lydi's finest. ' .. .. i lean into your nouns ~ you inch closer to my disowned verbs.. '

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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Emma, I am always honored by your reviews. Thank you so much. Lydi**
emmajoy

1 Month Ago

Love your writing, you know so...
Bitter sweet with a huge force of understanding within the context of the relationship. Powerful!

regards,
al

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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Thanks so much, Al. Lydi**
WOW, you just,,, um,,,,, holy cow!!!
the way you pull words together to create a scene in the readers mind is just,,,, um,,,,,, WOW.
I bow to the master wordsmith.
I so enjoy reading you.
This is poetry that makes me proud to say you are my friend and I know I am a better poet because of you and your writing. I just love the line:
"all the while playing peek-a-boo with that dream
we stored in our favorite denims all those years ago" Brilliant.

Big Huggs, Trace
PS...Wish I could give more than 100 rating below)

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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Trace, you have been one of my biggest fans for almost twenty years now. I thank you so very much. .. read more
This is an incredible use of metaphors blend with such softness. A true joy to read.

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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Jason. Lydi**
lovely,nice imagery in a poetic write

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Lydia

1 Month Ago

Thanks so much. Lydi**

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