Forsaken

Getting taken advantage off

Can't you just let me be
You're so blind you can't see
How easily you pushed me aside
And how easily you left me behind

Did i mean that little to you
I really didn't have a clue
I was drawn to your beautiful eyes
But all that lay behind was lies

Call me up now like everythings ok
I won't come running and obey
I'm done being your pawn
Those days are long gone

You left and made your choice
In my life you have no voice
Out of your life let me be clear
I will completely disappear

In the future something will happen
In your life something is lacking
My face will spring up in your mind
And you'll wish you never left me behind

Reviews

[fadingtale]

The pain can be truly felt within this poem! Thank you for submitting for all about love contest!

[Hebe]

We all meet these people, unfortunately ! your poem reflects the pain and bitterness grandly.

[Lovecraft]

Selfishness knows no bounds nor gender. A beautifully bitter poem about a love that was never truly there.

Overall it's pretty good, but I think you could improve it somewhat with a bit of revision. I believe the third stanza is fairly weak compared to the rest of them. Most of your stanza's are really good but the third one falls short.

But this is just my honest opinion, so take from it what you will. Just some constructive criticism.

[Lykos]

I agree with you on the third stanza, I didn't put as much effort into it as the rest. Thanks for the review. Appreciate it and your constructive criticism, helps me be better.

[Kathryn Smith]

This is gold. Well written! I've definitely had these thoughts over various people. They mean the world to you...and then boom it was all lies. Sigh. People these days. ;)

[Lykos]

Thank you , yeah plenty of people out there only out for themselves.