Glass in a stone

Tried writing a song and failed, this was the outcome

My heart, a piece of glass inside a rock,
It shattered from the emotion and shock.
How could you made me feel so alone,
Just like a beach with only one stone.

Your actions have crushed my soul,
I'm torn, I no longer feel whole.
You knew how deep I would fall,
Now to find normality, I can only crawl.

I just wanted you to be with me and stay,
Why did you get up, leave and go away
Your face will forever remain in my mind
My feelings for you, in my heart, confined.

Your leaving was so hard to bare
Out of my lungs you took the air
Eyes became heavy with tears
Come true had all my fears

I had let myself become addicted,
Now Into the abyss I've plummeted.
This is the cause of the feeling of rejection
Stuck in the home of the known Mr depression

Sitting and laughing with a crowd in a park
But in truth I'm completely alone in the dark
I only feel whole when of you I'm dreaming
I awake and my life loses all meaning

I'd have swam to the depths of the ocean,
Did that not show you my total devotion.
My inner spirit you had unconditionally,
My whole being showed you consistently.

Take a deep look into my eyes,
But the new me you won't recognise.
Now you can understand and fully see,
You turned your back and destroyed the old me.

Reviews

[Sinbulvinter]

I like the metaphors you use here and the emotions you express. It is a painful thing to feel this way.
You write poetry very well. Nice work here.

[Lykos]

Can't go wrong with a few metaphors, adds to the poem. Thanks for the review Sinbulvinter, appreciate it.