many days gone

many days gone

A Poem by de_maruf
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i didn't see you it's many days
heart blows wet air but eyes don't cry
soul wants you but feet don't follow your way
it's long since i saw last and many days gone away
i didn't see you it's many days

© 2012 de_maruf



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de_maruf
hmm

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I love how the message of this poem is not lost in its expression. It's simple and true. It feels

Posted 4 Years Ago


I like the book ends! :o) Do hearts blow? I have dry eyes too. It can be difficult to approach someone we are attracted to. Don't let the opportunity to 'connect' slip away.

Posted 4 Years Ago


very interesting

Posted 4 Years Ago


de_maruf

4 Years Ago

really?
Riley Mistwood

4 Years Ago

ofcourse
Short-and-sweet :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


If we don't follow. We can lose another. A poem of longing. Sometimes we decide a separation. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


Nice poem, it's short and very deep
I would just make some spelling changes and voila!
Other than that, this is a great piece of writing
Keep it up :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


i can feel the meaning and feelings but it needs more work to correct spelling and gramatical mistakes such as;
i havent seen you for many days
heart blows,
soul wants, feels, your way

it has been so long since.. i saw you for the last time


Posted 5 Years Ago


I agree with Dayran, give her a call, or your narrator of this poem should. You have captured very nicely the fear of rejection that resides within the heart of those who long for the love of just one that is believed to be unatainable. Though perhaps the subject has not been met, her absence during times she is normally seen brings upon the anxiety of the opportunity of love being lost. Even though the love felt may be fantasy, the feeling is very real. Excellent job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


de_maruf

5 Years Ago

thanks a lot
HO..Hmmmmm

Posted 5 Years Ago


Give her a call!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


de_maruf

5 Years Ago

then how will i write it?

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