my breath

my breath

A Poem by de_maruf
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writing so many days later, nothing to say about it, it is alike my other writings

"
when i sleep, dream come
when i dream, you come 
but when you come in my memory 
i can't, i can't sleep

when clouds float, i see it
when it rain, i get wet
but i feel pain, because
i miss, miss your presence

when i close my eyes, i see you
when i open it, i want to see you
you are my breath, i can't stop it
so indeed i need you.

© 2012 de_maruf



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Perhaps you think this is like your other writings but I suggest that they are all different. Unless the words are exactly alike, in exactly the same order then no; it is not the same as your other work. This is a purple-tinged logistic penrose - a diagram of the heart's desire expressed as a fundamental law of nature and an autonomic function of the spirit, "...you are my breath, i can't stop it so indeed i need you" The fruit falls from the tree and strikes the ground but never in the same place or the same way twice; yet always with a thud of absolute certainty that it has followed its nature. As you have here in this poem. A laurel for your effort de_maruf.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

de_maruf

4 Years Ago

thanks for the fantastic analysis



Reviews

Oh the love that i feel in this poem, I love it, well written ^_^

Posted 11 Months Ago


A poem that describes what it is like to be in love and loose it well done

Posted 4 Years Ago


good? no. Great? Definitely! Great job!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Great one...... The short lines are real piercing.... Its raw and beautiful

Posted 4 Years Ago


What a lovely poem! You're really good at expressing emotions through poetry :)
Keep up the good work! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


very well done this was very nice very expressive of love and the desire to see that person agsin

Posted 4 Years Ago


I have felt that longing and know this pain. Well expressed my friend.

Posted 4 Years Ago


de_maruf

4 Years Ago

thanks
Good one de_maruf the lines are pretty good and raw

Posted 4 Years Ago


Perhaps you think this is like your other writings but I suggest that they are all different. Unless the words are exactly alike, in exactly the same order then no; it is not the same as your other work. This is a purple-tinged logistic penrose - a diagram of the heart's desire expressed as a fundamental law of nature and an autonomic function of the spirit, "...you are my breath, i can't stop it so indeed i need you" The fruit falls from the tree and strikes the ground but never in the same place or the same way twice; yet always with a thud of absolute certainty that it has followed its nature. As you have here in this poem. A laurel for your effort de_maruf.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

de_maruf

4 Years Ago

thanks for the fantastic analysis
it's beautifuly peaceful. i love it, it's so adorale, and the way you put the words was amazin, well done :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


de_maruf

4 Years Ago

thanks

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